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eIitebanao

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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 9:18 pm

http://peach-muffinz.deviantart.com/art/Call-for-Butterflies-65472183

Hee hee, I'm proud of this. :]]
And that doesn't happen often. >w<

Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 9:21 pm

Kangaroo S.T.U.

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Thank you so much for the critique, Kangaroo! :3

Oh, and another thing to be critiqued...>w<

-insert chibi goodness here. :]]-

((It's a chibi, just in case for the people that didn't nkow...>w<))

Chibi chibi!

biggrin mind the lenght of the arms there. The ninja on the right has a very very short lower arm than Sakura.

On Sakura's face the eye on the right is far larger than the one on the left. If iit's for perspective the eye on the right needs to be a bit smaller still.

biggrin just watch out for proportion and you'll do fine.

For Sakura's eyes, the left eye was...what do you call it...like more scrunched? That's why Sakura's right eye is bigger. ><

Gah, can't think of the right word...but I do hope you understand my jibberish...D';

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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 12:04 pm

here's a comic ^_^
Comic. ^_^

Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:30 pm

Mystic:

biggrin comic! sweet I love comics

:3 I understand the action and the story

I'm not entirely clear what's happening in the second panel there o_o

I believe the short haired guy is looking over the top of the book yes? I suggest making it a little more clear with the hands on the book that they're from the other person. I think making the base of the arms a little wider and the wrists a nudge narrower might to give the illusion of perspective might help achieve this.

For the third panel :3 be careful of the character balance. X3 It looks like they're gonna tip forward fall over in the chair.

Other then that I think it's coming along 3nodding

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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:35 pm

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Kangaroo S.T.U.

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Thank you so much for the critique, Kangaroo! :3

Oh, and another thing to be critiqued...>w<

-insert chibi goodness here. :]]-

((It's a chibi, just in case for the people that didn't nkow...>w<))

Chibi chibi!

biggrin mind the lenght of the arms there. The ninja on the right has a very very short lower arm than Sakura.

On Sakura's face the eye on the right is far larger than the one on the left. If iit's for perspective the eye on the right needs to be a bit smaller still.

biggrin just watch out for proportion and you'll do fine.

For Sakura's eyes, the left eye was...what do you call it...like more scrunched? That's why Sakura's right eye is bigger. ><

Gah, can't think of the right word...but I do hope you understand my jibberish...D';

oooh! I'm sorry D: I didn't see it that way

on your last piece with the purple background

biggrin I think this is the best one you've posted so far!

TOTALLY digging the hands there! The on on the left's got a really solid pose that gives depth to the image. Lighting seems to be alright too

I think this is done rather nicely 3nodding

Posted: Tue Sep 25, 2007 7:50 pm

-very happy-

Gah! Thank you for teh crituqe and comment! >w<

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Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 5:05 pm

hmmhmm we need more posts in here

Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 6:14 pm

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is this good like the general area of shading.... with the light source being in the top left cornor

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TootsieFruity

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Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 7:20 pm

I need critique, other than 'it's too light'
I have crappy pencils gonk

Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 3:54 pm

http://peach-muffinz.deviantart.com/art/Haruno-Sakura-Pure-Serenity-66940068

and

http://peach-muffinz.deviantart.com/art/NaruSaku-Faded-Memories-66656075

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C+C! >w<

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Kangaroo S.T.U.
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Posted: Fri Oct 12, 2007 2:24 am

Hamena

is this good like the general area of shading.... with the light source being in the top left cornor

Is the light behind her or in front of her or to the side? Right now it's hard to tell because there's no indication of how far away the light is compared to where the character is standing.

If the light is behind them, all of the front would be in shadow o.o

Posted: Fri Oct 12, 2007 2:28 am

TootsieFruity

I need critique, other than 'it's too light'
I have crappy pencils gonk

X3 cute way to draw the curls in the hair heart

biggrin the face is somewhat off center. The jaw looks as if it is too far to the left. Scoot it over to the right a bit more to make things look more evened out. 3nodding

I see you've go the construction lines in there to keep the head shape 3nodding Nice!

o.o if you've got photoshop you can darken up the lines a bit

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Posted: Fri Oct 12, 2007 2:34 am

[Shimizu-chan]

http://peach-muffinz.deviantart.com/art/Haruno-Sakura-Pure-Serenity-66940068

and

http://peach-muffinz.deviantart.com/art/NaruSaku-Faded-Memories-66656075

:33

C+C! >w<

3nodding ooh nice you're work is looking better and better

I think if you wanted to get more into painting to try some color theory stuffs.

Cool colors vs warm colors

color temperature

I'm not sure though, since that type of cell shading is how they do it in cartoons. Also I don't know what program you use. o.o

I'd like to see you do some more stuff that isn't Naruto X3 to see what else you can draw but that's just me sweatdrop

Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2007 6:10 am

TootsieFruity

I need critique, other than 'it's too light'
I have crappy pencils gonk

i realy love this picture its so cute i sorrta like the light lines
but i feel you need work on the face a bit (i see you have got the sketch lines on the face to make everything center good job smile )

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