Welcome to Gaia! ::

Gaian Grammar Guild

Back to Guilds

The Gaian Grammar Guild is a refuge for the literate, a place for them to post and read posts without worrying about the nonsensical ones. 

Tags: grammar, literate, english, language 

Reply Poetry
Goodnight to you

Quick Reply

Enter both words below, separated by a space:

Can't read the text? Click here

Submit

Honeydukes Lover

PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 6:48 am
Riding along on the dark side of the road,
Walking to my humble abode.
The light in my head has gone dim.
I haven't an idea of this or that,
Can't see anything but my hat.

I feel like I'll fall,
Just right there lose it all.
The feelings weirder than ever.
I've never felt this way.
I think that I'm starting to sway.

Someone must help me,
Come take it upon thee
To help the girl about to fall.
I think I will anyway.
Goodnight to you, for letting me faint.
 
PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 6:02 pm
Well, I liked it.

The only thing that got me was how it had a "Formal" approach and then all of a sudden it's "Hey".
Then again, there is a way to view it as the Formality is a beauty and the "Hey" is a balance with reality.
Either way, I liked it.
But I would have liked more detail on what is wrong with her.
Alas, that is because I am Literately greedy.
;D
 

Emilem

Quotable Dabbler

6,650 Points
  • Forum Dabbler 200
  • Generous 100
  • Big Tipper 100

Honeydukes Lover

PostPosted: Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:15 pm
Emilem
Well, I liked it.

The only thing that got me was how it had a "Formal" approach and then all of a sudden it's "Hey".
Then again, there is a way to view it as the Formality is a beauty and the "Hey" is a balance with reality.
Either way, I liked it.
But I would have liked more detail on what is wrong with her.
Alas, that is because I am Literately greedy.
;D

I kinda made it rhyme, when the rest of it didn't. I saw that this was weird, so I changed it slightly, as you may see.

And as for what's wrong with her....I was thinking either hurt/dizzy, drunk with no ride, or just broke up with someone at their house and now has no ride.  
Reply
Poetry

 
Manage Your Items
Other Stuff
Get GCash
Offers
Get Items
More Items
Where Everyone Hangs Out
Other Community Areas
Virtual Spaces
Fun Stuff
Gaia's Games
Mini-Games
Play with GCash
Play with Platinum