something for us to do

[nitnit]

Read and bash/review this fanfic:

http://members.iinet.net.au/~aceywacey/pokemon.htm  

[darkslasherX]

I think the writer needs to learn English. Seriously, he's using big words to try and sound smart, but he's coming up as a total idiot on my radar.

Also, he needs to get his facts straight. There's NO way a Charizard could be 20 feet tall.

It's totally cliché, too. A young hero comes to save everyone from a future of destruction, blah blah blah.  

[nitnit]

I agree with the cliches (that's ash btw) but I dont think you even read more than 1 chapter. Also, care to cite where he fails to use big words correctly?  

[The Caj]

THIS IS AN AWESOME FANFIC AND THE GUY IS SO DEEP AND INTRINSIC I THINK THAT HE IS A COOL GUY THAT DOESN'T AFRAID OF ANYTHING!!!
ONE TIME I READ ONE A CHAPTER AND I WISH I COULD RITE LIKE THAT ONE DAY LIKE HIM CUZ I WANNA BE A RITER ONE DAY AND HE'S SO GOOD AT THAT HE USES WORDS THAT ARE COOL!!!  

[darkslasherX]

nitnit

I agree with the cliches (that's ash btw) but I dont think you even read more than 1 chapter. Also, care to cite where he fails to use big words correctly?

I read the first chapter, then lost interest.

The first paragraph is where it's most evident.

Quote:

An icy chill pervaded through the black night.

"Pervaded through" is redundant, and just bad English.

Quote:

Cold, except for the unnatural hot wind blowing south with the strong scent of acrid smoke.

Sentence fragment. Also bad English. (See what I did there?)  

[nitnit]

But in chapter 6 I think brock shanks misty.  

[The Caj]

Unfortunately, I have to agree somewhat with darkslasher. This is something that runs rampant through the internet, however, and so most people should be used to it. Amateur skills are what pretty much make the net nowadays, which is why it fails miserably.  

[nitnit]

I thought it failed because in order to cure his poison ash has to ******** misty.