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 Posted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 5:33 pm
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Posted: Thu Apr 06, 2006 2:43 am
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I love this, you describe the scene so well and the Imagery is amazing, I really relate to this poem because we had to climb a mountin for a hike i was on and i was thinking one day this will all be aparments and house's, yes, so I really liked your poem and I do have a bit of advice it's just at the end when you say.....
Quote: How this mountain might no longer have a song.
I loved this line but I feel that you'd have been better off saying..
Quote: How this mountain might no longer have that song.
but that could just be me...
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