Deliberations upon Insubstantiated Matter

[calviness]

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[hapahaole]

First Date has a lot of good imagery and descriptions. I like how you compared popcorn to flowers. The title kinda threw me though. What exactly are you trying to say about first dates? Is it that you're so bored all you care to notice is the trash on the floor? That's what I got out of it. I thought it was rather amusing, though I'm not sure if that's what you intended or not.  

[Starlit-Chan]

I find the first one humerous. A first date that sounds like it didnt go too well if one of them ewas able to notice how pretty the popcorn was on the floor ha ha

I love this

"beneath the unhealthy sheen
of Opal-tinted dreams"

Best lines out of the poem