critisism is taken

[Toobits]

would any of you be nice enough to please sign my petition so that we may have an arena for poetry?

If you would like to sign click on the picture below...




here's a poem for you to read while your are here:


I can feel as you hold me close to you,
There?s nothing you would rather do?.

Than be here with me, forevermore,
I love you deep, down to the core.

I love you too much to use any words,
Hopefully you?ll know that, if you look up at the birds.

If you can just hold me for a minute longer,
The love I have for you will get stronger.

As you lean in close for the enchanting kiss,
My eyes light up, heart filled with bliss.

Sometimes when you whisper in my ear,
I get in my eye a loving tear.

I stand here in this moment, wishing for it to never end,
And sometimes I wish, that I could make time bend.

?You?re here,
There?s nothing I fear??

That?s the way I feel for you,
I hope it is enough for you to that my love is true.

I know that we are meant to be,
Look deep into my eyes, you?ll know our destiny.  

[Moppeh]

It's good, but some of the rhymes feel a little forced.  

[Borerai]

it's vibrant ....in a way.
I like it  

[[shazz]]

Yeah it seems a little forced, but overall it's pretty good.