keeper poem

[gonster120]

the keeper

thy raven sits upon a tree
thy raven has yet to be
an internal keeper of souls
thy raven calls upon the dead
it calls for the ones who die from a burn
to the ones who died for there childerns life
thy raven sits upon a tree
and has yet to be
a keeper


-gonster120 mrgreen  

[gonster120]

any comments that you wish to put about it are good.  

[Starlit-Chan]

Interesting.

I think it could use a little neatening here and there if you dont mind me saying, but its a good short poem  

[Pup in Fluff]

The lines are a little shaky but it's a good poem otherwise.

Also: I don't know if you've noticed or not yet but I edited your second post. This is a guild for literates so please make sure you type out your words and do what you can to spell correctly and type gramatically correct. Thank you.