Vacant

[Sheep Kitchen]

I'm actually interested in how other people interpret this. The most I get from the people that read my stuff is that it's good... doesn't really tell me much...

Vacant

Listen for the whispers
Of the honey insanity
Another apple on the ground
Rotting away in all the decay
A lonely gravel road reaches
For a saddened home

A broken swing says
To come over and make repairs
Shattered windows and tattered curtains
Tell of cruelty and drunken fights

Missing clothes in a chaotic closet
Breathe of a broken family
Battered toys tell
Of children
They watched it all unfold
Says the beaten pillows
They watched it all unfold

A woman left in a hurry
The broken door recalls
Something went wrong
Says the lonely scarecrow
Something went wrong
And they saw it all  

[Lost In The Red]

Well, no one has commented and I find it sad. It is a great poem, but as for my interpretation.... I believe that the scarecrow acts as a person just watching all those events happening without offering help. Also, the scarecrow could symbolize somebody who has no choice but to watch because they can't do anything to stop it.

Comment on my poem please smile "A Life That Was"  

[Aella_chan]

Quite sad, and the poem is very good.
But I think it lacks alittle bit of something I can't really describe.
It is as if the entire poem focuses on too much so it seems things in the poem happen alittle too fast.
It could have been written better, with alittle bit more of musical touch.
What I mean by that - is that, probably the poem lacks 'colour' in it.
Everything is put into simple words and not focused on deeply.
That's a sort of poem I'd call 'gray' since evrything is put in it simply and obvious.

Still, I'd have to say the poem isn't 'bad', it just could be improved.  

[IrishSpitfire]

its quiet interesting but its missing something, there needs to be a little more depth in what happened. That would make it better. But all in all I liked it good job 3nodding  

[Baka Gothic Kitsune]

I like this a lot, for some reason. It makes me picture an old house that's been abandoned for a long time. It has a ghost story feel to it, if that makes any sense. sweatdrop