Another New Guy

[evans174]

Yea im probobally the newest dude. So you may like my stuff you may not. To tell the truth i dont care id like constructive criticism, not monkeys baballing on about nothing. Thanks.  

[hapahaole]

Welcome! Just a warning, it takes people a while to respond here sometimes so don't get discouraged. You like critisim? Yay! I'm always hesitant to give it because I don't know if that's what people wanted or not. But if you want it... twisted Don't worry, I'll try to be nice. Welcome and enjoy the guild!  

[evans174]

Hey thanks, Its good to hear someone nice. You have made my day. By the way in my learning lab class we sent letters to the troops and i sent them each a poem. Do you think that was good or bad?  

[WildWildWindWhisperer]

Hello! 4laugh

A very cheery welcome to the Writing On The Wall Guild.
Please, do cruise around, browse the various threads and leave suitable comments( If you wish) .
We sincerely and dearly wish for you enjoy your membership and appreciate your wordsmith skills.
I, am a WindWhisperer( WildWildWindWhisperer) and am a proud vice captian of the guild. Pup in Fluff, Ascoutic Downfall and myself are here if you prefer any assistance. Simply send any of us a Pm, or leave a message with the appropraite location.

May your day be blessed!


Later.....
WildWildWindWhisperer wink  

[WildWildWindWhisperer]

evans174

Hey thanks, Its good to hear someone nice. You have made my day. By the way in my learning lab class we sent letters to the troops and i sent them each a poem. Do you think that was good or bad?

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That is such a wonderfful and generous concept.
It would be a sincere honor if you where to display your poetry here; within the guild.
I, am looking forward to reading your works.



Later...
...................WindWhisperer wink ( vice -captian)
wahmbulance  

[evans174]

Yeah soon ill put some stuff in....i just dont feel like i fit in.  

[evans174]

I decided to put a poem on....pup knows this one already. its about a guy named barney bowman who fell from the room of SU's carrier dome to the steps of section 118-119. he died.
His last descent
Upon the dome he descended that day
going up in the only way
the panels of the roof large and wide
as he walked the narrow beam
he had seen all he had seen
for some reason the wind began to blow
now he lies below
no one knows what happened that day he just slipped some will say
then again the roof may have swayed
saftey harnesses not enforced
really should have been of course
many people wonder of iron workrs come and passed
as many just reguard them as trash
when a death occurs it happens fast
so do not forget them as they brethe thier last.
Gray roob Sucks ock. The son of a b***h dosent care what happens to the ironworkers he represents. He even treets them as s**t. Good job in office a** wipe.  

[WildWildWindWhisperer]

Quite well done.
It has great emotion and empathy.
I enjoyed the toss in of a political statement and a word picture of the status of society .

Thank you, for sharing.


Sincerely.....
WildWildWindWhisperer wink  

[evans174]

Well, i dont understand but that meant.....but thanks for not shooting my work back in my face.  

[hapahaole]

Very interesting. Might I suggest breaking it into stanzas? Or spacing it in some other way. It makes it easier to read. The last two lines were hard for me to read. Lots of astrixes. Hehe, I'm a bit language sensitive. But good job. I love the idea of it. Thanks for sharing. I hope to read more of your stuff.  

[evans174]

Sorry bout that, I get quite angry with them. Unless your thier best friends you dont get work. I wish international would just slap them in the face and yell NOOBS!