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Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 7:46 am


	GHOSTS Just do not give up hope All you who enter here Some will live and some will die But all will taste a fear Pray your heart keeps beating Your breath waxes and wanes Think of all that's precious Let us ease your pain If you listen very carefully It's not difficult to hear Echoes of the voices That have left this world from here The sound of bones a broken The sight of flesh that's torn The smell of blood from those that didn't see another dawn The screams of mothers mourning The cries of widowed wives The tears... in there oceans All shed for shattered lives If these bricks could talk to us The stories they could tell of the things they've seen within these walls The gateway to heaven and hell It's not perfect, but at least it's better than Monotone, right? : /

Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:13 am


	Wow, I didn't think it was that bad. : \|

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Jane-Doe-is-dead

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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 11:08 am

Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 11:09 am

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hippiepoet1964

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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 6:15 pm


	I like your poem. It moved right along with great rhythm. I like ghosts and thought the write was well written. Thanks for sharing. Peace cool

Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 8:48 pm


	Meep. I'm just slightly confused by the imagery, but great imagery nonetheless. "The tears... in there(their) oceans All shed for shattered lives" I'm sure the 'there' was just a typo. That was my favourite part. Also, I liked how you concluded, as it gave a real feeling of finality to it. I have a similar poem which I will post right now.

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Xoqa Niner

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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 1:07 am

Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 11:19 am


	Lord_Skyy Meep. I'm just slightly confused by the imagery, but great imagery nonetheless. "The tears... in there(their) oceans All shed for shattered lives" I'm sure the 'there' was just a typo. That was my favourite part. Also, I liked how you concluded, as it gave a real feeling of finality to it. I have a similar poem which I will post right now. Aye... sweatdrop It was a typo, a bad one at that. I apologise. : ] Thank you for bringing it to my attention.

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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 11:21 am


	Xoqa Niner Err... Huh??? Yeah. stare Thanks...