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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 8:59 am
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:10 am
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:14 am
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Erm. How can those commas possibly fit in there?
So it should be something like this, maybe?
“Oh, no, we just wanted to show Seth my birthday present,” Syler told them, showing off her card. Randy and Luna only smiled.
“We’ll be off,” Peyton said, grabbing Syler by the arm and pulling her towards the door.
“We’ll be back later,(?) Seth,” Syler said. “Got shopping to do,(?) you know.”
Or that's how I would've done it at least sweatdrop Was it a printed story or a fanfiction or something? And isn't there a "Horror stories" forum somewhere, where this topic would've fitted better?
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:40 am
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:40 am
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ljosberinn Erm. How can those commas possibly fit in there?
So it should be something like this, maybe?
“Oh, no, we just wanted to show Seth my birthday present,” Syler told them, showing off her card. Randy and Luna only smiled.
“We’ll be off,” Peyton said, grabbing Syler by the arm and pulling her towards the door.
“We’ll be back later,(?) Seth,” Syler said. “Got shopping to do,(?) you know.”
Or that's how I would've done it at least sweatdrop Was it a printed story or a fanfiction or something? And isn't there a "Horror stories" forum somewhere, where this topic would've fitted better?
Good point; it doesn't exactly fit, but I think it fits better there than here.
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 11:55 am
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