To Glorify the Dawn

[Archdemonessa]

Oh, great heavens, open your eyes
Shine upon us your golden light
Wake us from this eternal sleep
Guide us as we spend our days

Oh, brave Athena, tell what you know
Teach us the ways we must live
Oh, kind Apollo, give us the heart
Show us the music that exists

Oh, gentle Hera, show us the way
Teach us to rule in our might
Oh, good Zeus, guide us from sin
Send us to the world of the gods

I found this wandering around in one of my notebooks. I like it a lot, but I wanted some critisism.  

[Gachetemas]

Artemis, your arrows,
Show us how to bow 'em.
Persephone, your flowers,
Show us how to grow 'em.
Any special gifts you have,
Be generous bestow 'em!

'Cus
Power isn't something that you keep to yourself.
It's not a trophy that you put on a shelf.
Power is a gift that can lift your spirits.
Let it echo from Olympus so that everyone can hear it!
(So that everyone can hear it.)

If you
Share the power then the sky's the limit!
Open up your heart and start
To share the joy within it!
If you broaden your horizons,
It's surprising what's out there.

The sky's the limit
if you share!

-That's from Look Out, Olympus! You'd like that musical.  

[Archdemonessa]

I'd like to go see that one day. From the blurb, it seems interesting.

Acctually, the poem was a cause of a death to someone I loved, and I've been really emo since.  

[Gachetemas]

You killed someone with your poem? I didn't think it was that bad. It wasn't a great read, either. I'm sorry.  

[Archdemonessa]

No, they died, and I created a poem after their death.