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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 8:45 pm

I'm writing a story but need a little help. I'll copy in part of the story:

"Sometimes he would turn on the television just to watch the body language of the latest senator or governor with something to hide. It was their eyes which always gave them away. He believed in the saying that the eyes are the windows to the soul. Many times he followed a story in which a person of acclaimed status talked to the people and lied."

Am I using the word 'accalimed' in the proper context? I know it's definition is : To praise enthusiastically and often publicly; applaud. To acknowledge or declare with enthusiastic approval. But am I right to use it this way?

Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 4:15 am

Deaf.Screams.

I'm writing a story but need a little help. I'll copy in part of the story:

"Sometimes he would turn on the television just to watch the body language of the latest senator or governor with something to hide. It was their eyes which always gave them away. He believed in the saying that the eyes are the windows to the soul. Many times he followed a story in which a person of acclaimed status talked to the people and lied."

Am I using the word 'accalimed' in the proper context? I know it's definition is : To praise enthusiastically and often publicly; applaud. To acknowledge or declare with enthusiastic approval. But am I right to use it this way?

Sounds right to me...although you do need a comma after "many times." 3nodding Just thought I'd point that out.

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Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 7:32 am

I believe in Jesus Christ, my Savior. If you do too, and aren't scared to admit it, then copy and paste this into your signature.

That sounds alright. Other words you could use as well are prominent, esteemed and high.

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Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 7:42 am

It is grammatically correct, but may I offer a suggestion?

'Many times he followed a story in which a person of acclaimed status talked to the people and lied.'

Could be more smoothly phrased as:

'He spent hours following the stories, catching every lie of the well-acclaimed.'

'He had lost track of how many of the 'well-acclaimed' he'd seen on TV, lying and lying, and lying some more. And he was the only one who could see it.'

Feel free to ignore me if I'm out of line, but 'in which' really bogs a sentence down.

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