Tragedy(A Poem-Hinted ShinoHaseo)

[Takumishan]

I saw this part of the guild forum, and I figured, what the hey, I'll add the poem that I wrote on Fanfiction.Net. Now I warn you, this was the first poem that I have ever wrote since 5th grade poetry class, so some parts of it might not really make sense, especially since I was trying to make it rhyme.

~Tragedy~

I'm falling towards the ground
I cannot think straight
What could of gone wrong?
What could of led to this fate?

My vision is fading
All I can see is black
I fear that I may die here alone
I wish I could change things, take everything back

I wish that I had not destroyed the guild
I wish that my friends, Sakisaka, Tabby, Haseo; that they were all here
I wish that I had not decided
To meet Ovan there

Key of the Twilight
What does it mean, this key?
I can no longer remember
What use it had for me

I'm disentegrating
I can see the light
Does this mean that my time has come?
Should I walk towards this light, ever so bright?

The door suddenly opens
I turn my head to see
I cannot believe my eyes
It's Haseo, has he come to rescue me?

Is it too late?
I see his eyes consumed with fear
He runs to me as I call his name
I fear the end is near

I cannot move
He holds me in his arms, his body shaking with fear
I close my eyes
The last thing I see are his eyes full of tears

I cannot help but think
Could it really be
That all along...
He really loved me?

He is calling my name
He asks me to pick up the phone
He keeps telling me to hold on
He wishes that he had made his love known

I begin to think to myself
As I fade away
It was him I loved
He was my sunshine, he was my ray

Goodbye Haseo
The light has consumed me now I see
I wish that we had more time
To be together, just you and me

I feel myself stir, my vision has returned
I open my eyes
But I am not here with Haseo anymore
I wish that this was a trick, not just lies

The computer is flashing
I'm laying on the floor
The phone is ringing
And now I know no more...

~End of Poem~

Comments? Critizism?  

[BreathLessX]

Nice. you got some creativity going on there.  

[iTasukaru]

Very deep. I like it. ^^