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rofl for the last dead part



and yea its really hard to find words about reactions and all

like
"the are at me, now i have no chance to live i have to say good bye" he says griefly putting his hands over her shoulder, and runs crying....!!


is it fine??

how i should improve it??

Hey! I know no one will take the time to read this, but! I would like some help adding on to this. If you do read it, please tell me if it helped or if there's anything I should add...?

YES, I am mean, and NO, I do not care if your intelligence is offended. (:

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Here's a guide you should all read as soon as you can.

Got it?

Ok recruits, here we are.



One the biggest pet peeves of mine. You need to use correct grammar and punctuation! When talking, these --& " <--- come in handy. Come on- I'm sure you all have a 3rd grade education and you should know this by now. Here's and example.



Wonder what's wrong? Well, quite a few things there.



See? These "" things help. So do commas, as they break up your sentence more. I added 'and howled' because it seemed more appropriate, however that's just my opinion. You really don't need that. And see how at the end, I added what kind of howl it was? If you just say "howl!" you don't really know the meaning behind it.

Is she being nice, or does Misty suddenly want to rip your head off? We'll never know unless you state it.



Ever hear of something called godmodding? It's where you appoint yourself the official god of the rp and wreak havoc.

Seriously.

Goddmodding is basically making yourself the god. You send people flying across the room without their permission. Don't understand? Look at this.



NononononoNO!

RIGHT:

Misty growled, swiping a paw at Charm. sending him flying across the room.

See how I crossed out the pat about sending him flying across the room? Charm isn't your character- it's up to the person playing him whether or not he's going to get beaten up or not. And, if you are Charm, try to make him get hit at least once or twice; otherwise he is a gary-stu. We're covering those now.



You may have heard of them, but you probably wonder 'Who/what the heck is Gary-Stu and Mary-Sue?' They're basically the same thing, except Mary-Sues are female characters and Gary-Stus are male character.

They're the ones we all hate in real life, yet still make up. Why? No one knows, but it is sure as hell that they are annoying.

They are the perfect people. They never get hit, always are pretty, and perfect in every way. Still don't understand? Here's a dreaded Mary-Sue in profile form.



Is it just me, or is she so perfect it is scary and makes you want to rip out her guts? Now, not only is she perfect in every way, she also is very good at not getting hit, and likes to godmod. Here's an rp example.




Wow, just WRITING that makes me want to hurt someone. She didn't get hit- ONCE. Even when Charm was obviously trying his hardest. That's not right. NO ONE, NO ONE is that perfect. If they are, they need to be severely tortured. Now, unless Charm is 3 and Angel is a 24 year old karate master, do you think this is actually going to happen? No. No. NO.NOOOO!!!!




Okay, this is a bit of a problem me and Celestial totally agree on.

TOO MUCH ROMANCE = SUCKY RP.

There have been wayyy too many make-out fests in other rp's. Seriously. TONE IT DOWN. NOW. It's creepy and disgusting when they start making out or kissing one too many times in public. A kiss or two now or then is ok, but for the kissing every two sentences, keep it to the mails, pleeasseee.

And not just kissing, too.

Sitting in a lap staring lovingly at one's eyes is just creepy and wwaaayyy too lovey. Not to mention it's a total waste of space. What is gazing into each other's eyes going to do for the total plot? I mean, come on. A little cuddling's OK, just not too often. Flirting's fine.

Psh, you mortals and your romance. It makes me sick!




I know you all may be chewing your fingernails and wondering, am I literate enough? If I'm not I know Momo will eat me!!!!. Do not worry, folks, as long as you READ THIS you will not be bitten, harmed, or (possibly) not verbally abused.

Section One: What is 'being literate?'

lit·er·a·cy [lit-er-uh-see] –noun
1. the quality or state of being literate, esp. the ability to read and write.
2. possession of education: to question someone's literacy.
3. a person's knowledge of a particular subject or field: to acquire computer literacy.
—Synonyms 2. learning, culture.

Section Two: Um, what?

Basically, we consider literacy the ability to use punctuation, write complete sentences, and use correct grammar. In order to be accepted in this rp, you must be able to write at least 4 sentences in EVERY post. If you're braindead, too bad. Have your character twirl their hair or something.

To Sum It Up

If you are lazy, just read this section to get the idea of what we do and don't want.

DO'S:

Post: "Hello, my name is Maria. Who are you?" Maria blushed slightly while saying this. The stranger was incredibly cute. It took all her nerve to even say 'Hello'.

(( The speaking sentences count as sentences in the paragraph. You can have all four sentences of the character talking, but we prefer if you at least add some non-speaking content. ))

Post: She cried, sobs wracking her whole body. Maria had no idea what to do: her whole life had turned upside down. She turned her tear-streaked face to the sky, standing post-still. The wind whipped her long, black hair.

(( There is at least one space after punctuation. YOU MUST HAVE AT LEAST ONE SPACE AFTER PUNCTUATION MARKS( except "these" ) OR I WILL EAT YOU!!!!! ))

DONT'S

Post: hi im marina who are you?

(( LKHSDKJfHKSJDF. No punctuation, capitols, AND IT IS ONLY ONE SENTANCE. NOOOO. ))

Post: Marina laughed as she sliced Merri in half. "Take that you pathetic mortal!"

(( Merri is not your character. You do not control her. You can't slice her in half. ))

Post: Marina had long blond hair. She is very pretty. Everyone likes her. She never gets mad. She is nice. She is popular and all the boys are always asking her out.

(( ...... TOO PERFECT. ))

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That's all for now.....