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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:35 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:47 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:49 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:54 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:01 pm
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nitnit I agree with the cliches (that's ash btw) but I dont think you even read more than 1 chapter. Also, care to cite where he fails to use big words correctly? I read the first chapter, then lost interest.
The first paragraph is where it's most evident.
Quote: An icy chill pervaded through the black night. "Pervaded through" is redundant, and just bad English.
Quote: Cold, except for the unnatural hot wind blowing south with the strong scent of acrid smoke. Sentence fragment. Also bad English. (See what I did there?)
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:04 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:05 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 10:09 pm
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