Sweetest Massacre

[Maximilliardeau]

A cruel and horrifying scene
that no movie or picture can express
More cuts and wounds showed so clean
Every detail has left this mess

It gives all reasons to be scared of the dark
To see how everyone is tortured to death
To see them suffer, how they all leave their mark
Losing everything they have ever had.

The massacre is burned like a scar into your mind
And they will save you for last
So they manipulate you and leave you to find
out it's your own fault that this has come to past

And you'll blame yourself for not being able to safe
this family from the nightmare that also made your grave  

[Dragons Willow]

nicely done! it's kinda told like a story, but it's kept to a rythme and rhyme!....critique time!

in this line: "out it's your own fault that this has come to past"
>"past" should be "pass"...no worries it still sorta rhymes! biggrin

and this line: "And you'll blame yourself for not being able to safe"
>"safe" should be "save"

last but not least! i would break the last 2 lines into 4 same as the rest, like this:

And you'll blame yourself
for being unable to save
this family from the nightmare
that has also made your grave

*just a suggestion*
all that aside....i liked this! the "sweet" part of this is rather morbid...and i think that's what makes it! yays you!!! 4laugh