Hey guys? I done it again!

[ArmasTermin]

And you thought I would only have two zombie stories? Wrong! I've started a third. The difference? Usually when I start a zombie story I have no ideas, just "Hey, I think I'll make a story with zombies in it. That'll be neat, right?" but this time I have several plot points and events planned (planning. What a concept!) so there's little worry of me just trailing off at chapter two. Hell, this could end up as a full novel. I have a good feeling about it.

*Note that I did just finish writing this chapter and that it's 6:30am and no, I'm not just waking up, I'm just now going to bed. That and the word processor I'm using has no spellcheck, so excuse those little errors! I will go back over it in the morning, or afternoon since I won't be up till well after twelve. Oh joy! Anyway, tell me what you think of this opening and if you find any problems (not with spelling/grammar, I can get that later.)

EDIT: Wow, lot of errors. Lol. I fixed all the obvious stuff, but it wasn't enough to read it again for if you already did. If not, it should be better. Guys, please tell me what you think if you look over it. I love that feedback.



Stumbler Sickness

I'm sorry, but chapter one has been removed. I'm now (4/29/09) removing the earliest chapter every time I put up a new one to keep so much from being up at one time. I'm paranoid about people stealing my stories, you see. And although I generally trust you guys about that sort of thing, you can't be too careful. If you'd like to request a removed chapter, drop me a private message.  

[Krilliad]

Needs a few grammatical things here and there, but it sounds pretty much lie the best so far.


BTW :: sad I'm stil working on the instrument story, but I had to stop for finals...)  

[Stoic Socialist]

Sounds pretty good.

I'll just sit here, waiting for the next one. biggrin  

[Freak_090]

STOP MAKING NEW STORIES BEFORE YOU FINISH THE OLD ONES!!!!!  

[ArmasTermin]

Freak_090

STOP MAKING NEW STORIES BEFORE YOU FINISH THE OLD ONES!!!!!

Lol. Actually, the first ones will continue in this one in a way. The main characters of the other two will be supporting characters or mentioned briefly in this one. So you'll learn what happened to them and such, though I've changed the setting (Kansas in stead of Missouri/Colorado.)  

[ArmasTermin]

Battlefield Reaper

Needs a few grammatical things here and there, but it sounds pretty much lie the best so far.


BTW :: sad I'm stil working on the instrument story, but I had to stop for finals...)

Oh that's fine, but I'm not sure that one will get anywhere. And if it does it will be on the backburner as I think about it.  

[ArmasTermin]

More for you guys to show I'm not flaking out on this one. At least not yet.




Sorry, as I added Chapter 14 I've taken this one off. PM me if you're interested in chapter 2.  

[Freak_090]

ArmasTermin

Freak_090

STOP MAKING NEW STORIES BEFORE YOU FINISH THE OLD ONES!!!!!

Lol. Actually, the first ones will continue in this one in a way. The main characters of the other two will be supporting characters or mentioned briefly in this one. So you'll learn what happened to them and such, though I've changed the setting (Kansas in stead of Missouri/Colorado.)

ah, in that case you are saved.  

[Man of the Demoneye]

You do have a talent for writing. Best of luck and I hope we can see more.  

[ArmasTermin]

Thanks for the kind words so far. If any of you find anything that can be made better, don't hesitate to suggest it.




Chapter three has been removed for chapter fifteen. Sorry if you didn't get to read it.





*I don't know s**t about cars. So if anyone could tell me a problem that could happen to an old truck from a lot of idling that couldn't be fixed without proper parts. Like an engine overheating or something? I don't know.  

[Man of the Demoneye]

A belt breaking is the best thing that comes to mind right now. It could be fixed temporarily with a piece of rope, but no gurantees with that. The rope thing works with a V belt, but I don't know about a serpentiene belt. If it's an old truck, it is more likely to be a V belt.

Disclaimer: Don't believe everything you hear on the internet. More likely than not I don't have a clue what I am talking about. Also, don't rev your engine too high.  

[Freak_090]

1) Old rusty headers could brake from hitting a bump and over a period of time the valves could warp. (Heating and cooling)

2) Old pistons could brake.

3) The alternated might brake some how, and you would have no way to ignite the fuel.

4) Rusty gas tank has a leak

5) Ran over a zombie and it ends up leaking water or oil

6) Dead battery  

[ArmasTermin]

Thanks for you guys' suggestions. More follows.




OMG, this chapter is gone now! Sorry.  

[Man of the Demoneye]

Yay another update.

Just wanted to say that I appriciate you posting this on the forum for us to enjoy.