this is a poem i wrote tell me if u like it.

[ino rockz 126]

MY LOVES
he my old love,
is nothing but dust in the wind,
but my new love,
is as ripe as the newly picked strawberries,
and as plump as the oranges swaying in the wind,
thoe he has gone in a different direccion,
my love for him shale dicapear.  

[iBlack-SoulX]

Not too bad but you should have posted it in the literature and manga hall  

[II_Roku_II]

seriously, its not bad asside from minor spellingerrors, and if you wanted more feed back you should have posted it in the litterary section of the sub forums.  

[yuki_dreamer]

It's pretty good
Some spelling to take care of, but then again spelling has never been my thing ^^