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jesusfreak137

PostPosted: Mon Sep 28, 2009 3:12 pm


I want to start by saying that I love poetry. I kind of have my own poetry book, its just not published yet...because I'm not done with it, but I do have a publisher and editor!

Anyways,
Here is where I will post all my poetry that I post in the guild. I hope you enjoy it! Please comment on it and be honest. Constructive criticism is fine but please don't just say "It sucked" and be done if you didn't like it. Tell me why you didn't like it.


Thanks!
jesusfreak137  
PostPosted: Mon Sep 28, 2009 3:13 pm


So, I have no clue how this poem is going to turn out because I'm making it up on the spot and it is 1:49 AM where I am, so my brain is kinda asleep/dead. Hopefully it will wake up with my trying to write a new poem though.


The sky was black, just like your heart.
You never cared about me.
You never loved me.
All you cared about was yourself.
I didn't matter then,
So why should I matter now?
Why should now be any different,
When your heart is just as dark as before?

Tonight I will forget you,
Tonight you will be gone for good.
I'll never have to deal with you again;
You and your selfishness,
Your carelessness,
Your pitch-black heart.

Nothing can make your heart light.
Nothing can make it alright.
You're doomed for all eternity,
Just like you doomed me.

You doomed me to never love again.
You doomed me to always play pretend,
When it came to love.
You doomed me to never trust anyone,
To never give my heart away again.

I wish I'd never met you,
Because I'd still have my heart then.
It would be whole and healthy
And beating and bright red;
But your heart was rubbing off on mine.
My heart is now a dark red mass
Of dead trust and destroyed love;
Every slowing beat is a constant reminder
Of my mistakes, my foolishness,
My hopes and dreams for true love,
For a fairy-tale ending.

Now I know there is no such thing as true love.
There can't be such a thing as true love,
Because if there was, it was what I had for you.
But I didn't get my fairy-tale ending.
There was no true love for me,
Because your heart is like a cold stone,
Like obsidian.
Cold, stone, and black.

You will never change,
I am sorry to say,
Because in order for you to change,
You must want to;
And someone who wants to change
Wouldn't tear people's hearts to shreds,
Like you did to mine.


Sorry if you don't like it. I'm kind of asleep at my computer right now. Please be honest and let me know what you think.

And I write all different kinds of poetry, this just happened to be what came to mind right now.  

jesusfreak137


Fire_Krakker

PostPosted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 12:45 pm


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