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 Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 9:47 am
I am the quiet story teller who finds escape in typing,
A artist , deliverer of words,
Some not much more than lying,
You may find beauty inspiration or offense,
But keep in mind the person behind that limerick'd fence.
Hi I wrote this after I upset someone by saying something just because i liked the sound of it. Poetry can go too far.
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Posted: Wed Nov 11, 2009 10:59 am
poetry can go too far but only when ment to do so. two poems i wrote are my angel and lost with no angel and they are here on the poet's campsite. i like the poem very much. it's very unique and inspiring to me. i think u should keep writing. the use of a fpen in such wasy is a gift that shouldn't be wasted. smile
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Posted: Sat Dec 05, 2009 6:18 am
I like it. Is this a limerick...? If so, the rhyming could use some work, but if not, I love the poem. :)
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Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 6:27 pm
I'll try - but you do not have to change this poem how I would
I am the quiet story teller who finds an escape in typing,
An artist , no mere deliverer of words,
Some no more than a blatent lie,
You may find beauty, inspiration or offense
But keep in mind the person behind that limerick'd face.
I like the imagery evoked with the lying, questioning of feelings, and the intro. It's not a bad poem, it just didn't make sense in some tiny measures to me. Like where I replaced "fence" with "face" - the fence confuses me. You lead the audience through about lying and aristry but fence? where did that come from? Anyway - ignore me or diss me or take my "critique" to heart, any case - hope I helped >.<
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