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 Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 10:42 pm
I was feeling creative but I can't think of a title. I would love if any of you could give me an idea for a title, it would be much appreciated^^
Anyways tell me if you like it.... or even if you don't. I've never written a song before, so believe me, I'm not going to be surprised if you think it's crappy. Opinions and creative criticism is welcome people lol ^^
Also, I'm sorry if this isn't the right place, Since the music subforum was more interested in bands, I thout it would best end up fitting in this subforum,
It was a fairy tale start
without the happily ever after
you had my trust, i had your heart
I cared for you, and you loved me
I thought we were happy so tell me,
how did it all just fall apart?
I guess it was never enough
I made you smile, you made me laugh
you thought I could be the one
I thought we could have fun
I wanted us to be happy
and you wanted us in love
I thought we were happy so tell me,
how did it all just fall apart?
I guess it was never enough
you would protect me, i kept you from drowning
i would hope you were happy
you would wish i was safe
I thought we were happy so tell me,
how did it all just fall apart?
I guess it was never enough
You kept giving me wings,
I kept letting you fall
you made me cry but i broke your heart
we were happy, but it just wasn't enough
cause...
You loved me,
I cared for you
You made me laugh,
I made you smile
I kept you from drowning,
but you kept me safe
You gave me your heart,
but you never had mine
and even though we were happy,
It was never enough
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Posted: Sun Jan 03, 2010 11:01 pm
D: Don't say it's crappy, that's actually really good for your first try. =D
You should have more self confidence.
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 2:06 am
is this a poem or a song? coz i think it's great as a poem smile surprised rofl biggrin 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 8:50 am
^///^
Thank you, both of you.
And I always think songs are just poems put to music...... but since I don't have music to it I guess it's still a poem sweatdrop rofl
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