[Q] Demon, Lucielle Morningstar [Crits please?]

[Liath Black Di Hollow]

"Superbia erat quae angelos in daemones convertit; humilitas est quae homines in angelos facit."

Hello everybody, i'm new here and i hope i'm doing everything correctly if not please point it out d i'll do what i can to change things n.n

 

[Liath Black Di Hollow]

AMITYVILLE ACADEMY ENROLLMENT FORM

Name: Lucielle Morningstar
Nicknames: Lux
Gender: Female
Age: 16

Faction: Demon
Race: Superbia

Natural Ability:
Name Pending: Pride demons exude an aura of self confidence claiming all the attention as soon as they step into a room. When fully grown, their natural ability makes others to feel belittled and to quickly agree with what ever they say, very useful in politics. At this point, however, Lucielle’s aura might claim the attention of most students in a room and the adoration of those with a weak mind but the spell is easily and quickly broken.

...Oooor shapeshifting into a peacock >w< still deciding

Personality:

Deal with the devil
Lucielle is quite resourceful and you will never believe the things she is capable off. Even when something might seem like a lost cause or impossible dream she makes it happen. Yes, it might be largely thanks to Daddy dearest’s contacts but that is not the point. Now lets say you need a favor, let’s say there is something you desperately need, Lucielle will gladly assist you in acquiring your hearts desire, but you see everything has a price. She might not ask for payment right now but she has this little black leather notebook where she will write down your name for safekeeping and maybe one day in the future she will call and ask for a favor in return.

Better than you
She is a Pride Demon, arrogance is a trait deeply ingrained into her very nature, and when you grow up in a lavish mansion being tended by servants who are at your beck and call, answering to your tinniest, most ridiculous whims you might think the whole world is at your disposal and everyone else is inferior to you. Lucielle is well aware this is one of the most problematic and annoying characteristics oh her clan and she does try very hard to control her personality, if she wants to be successful in politics and establish connections with other Clans and Species she knows she has to learn how to treat them as equals, how ever she might still slip from time to time….it’s a work in progress.

Etiquette Obsessed
From a young age Lux was taught to proper etiquette and good manners and treat everyone politely, no matter if it was the scullery maid or her Lady Mother. Some might think this would contradict the very nature of Pride Demons, how ever if you take into consideration how important it is to keep up appearances and be simply perfect in every aspect, its not hard to understand why they are obsessed with good manners. Treating those they deem inferior to them with politeness gains them their trust, it’s all about politics after all.

A place for everything and everything in its place
Lucielle knows, at any given time, exactly where each an everyone of her belonging are. Her school bag is neat and organized, her room is spotless, even her school notes are all pretty, tagged and color coded, her clothes are organized by color and her books in alphabetical order. Yes she does realizes she might be overdoing it a bit but she just can’t help it, she just likes her stuff to be where it should. Looking at other people’s messes can irk her to no end, and she will try to not interfere, however if it is someone she is close to she will boss whom ever the messy perpetrator be until they clean and organize the space.


Why are they enrolled in Amityville Academy? Lucielle comes from one of the oldest and most prestigious Sin Family Clans in Halloween, as the only Pride demon in her family it is up to her to continue the most ancient and noble line of Morningstar. Clan members are expected to excel at everything and anything to continue being one of the most influential families in town, politically speaking mainly but also in other aspect of everyday Halloween life.

This is a lot of pressure in Lux, even if she says she is honored and the task expected from here will be easily accomplished she has inner doubts and all that pressure is starting to make her crack. Her parents did not asked for her opinion when they enrolled her but going off to school is a blessing for Lucielle, this might give her three years to breath a little easier with out having her perfect mother breathing down her neck every minute of the day, as well as some time to think about something that has been bothering her for a while: giving up her lineage.

FEAR Ability: I want lux to specialize in actual offensive combatt, if only long range. would it be possible for her tochannel her Fear through a weapon, like a whip or Bow and arrows?

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Physical Description:


Eye Colour: Deep purple, thick dark eyelashes
Hair Colour/Style: Black, long straight. She keeps bangs falling to the sides of her face.
Skin Colour: Flawless ivory.
Clothing Style/Colours: She favors elegant couture, everything is hand made specifically tailored for her. Her favorite colors are: Gold, Black, Teal and Royal Purple.
She has a headpiece with a golden crown and falling threads, she NEVER takes this off, its her signature accessory.
Extra:
Her nails/claw are tastefully long, most of the time covered in golden claw caps.
She has two sets of horns, once thin and small more or less at temples height, the other pair are long twisting horns that go into the back. They are gradient from purple to Cyan/Blue [tektek reference xP]
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[Liath Black Di Hollow]

Dolor temporarius, Superbia aeternum.



Likes
Fresh Fruit and Honeyed Wine [she’s a vegan]
Fine silk and jewelry
Politics
Her favors notebook.

Dislikes
Dirt, clutter, disorder.
Unpunctuality
Rudeness/Lack of good manners
Not being in control  

[Liath Black Di Hollow]

Hear my voice daughter of Vanity and Gold

Fallen Morningstar, Answer my call

Gilded Lucielle

Fun Facts

=She has a pet Peacock
-She would like to focus her Fear into Offensive Combat but her parents disapprove of this.
=She always gets what she wants because she knows the prize on everything and how to manage people
-Her clan takes pride on saying the very Lucifer is their ancestor, Lux knows this is nothing but exaggerated gossip.
=Her father is a Greed Demon while her mother is a Pride Demon, she takes after her mother, obviously.
-She has three older brothers who treat her like a princess, Lux is her family's pride and joy and while she enjoys all the attention the pressure is starting to =get to much and she is afraid of cracking.
-It drives her insane when her Lady Mother or Daddy Dearest summon her by full name.
=Back home her personal bodyguard/nanny/nurse/BFF is a Werewolf Monster names Uilleam, he has been tending to her for most of her life and was totally distraught when he was told he couldn't accompany Lux to school. [PS he is thinkign of enrolling in school to keep an eye on her]
-Even if most Demons don't like Monsters Lux has a certain appreciation for them, their raw strength and overall lack of control fascinates her and draws her like a magnet.
=Vampires absolutely and totally disgust her for some reason, Ghost creep the fear out of her and she can not stand the Undead they just make her stomach turn.  

[Liath Black Di Hollow]

Fan Art

Gradient Text Color Codes
Gold #FFD700
Purple #800080  

[Liath Black Di Hollow]

"You love too much" I've said; sharp with a briar heart. Hard edges cutting up from the inside killed a rose, now wilted and dry.

Revamping the old quest xP

"You love too little" I've been told by a thorn-less rose. Soft petal lips and honeyed voice, rose blooming bright.

 

[iloveyouDIE]

Liath Black Di Hollow

Lovely character idea!! Just a few comments~

For your FEAR - As a demon your FEAR will not be connected to a weapon. Weapon FEARs are restricted to Reapers. That isn't to say she doesn't know how to use a weapon, but her FEAR ability should have nothing to do with it. FEAR powers are manifestations of the character's own energy. In most scenarios your character would not have access to weapons so she must be able to defend herself without that. This doesn't mean that she can't have a ranged attack! This will just have to manifest in some other way!

For natural ability- Having an attractive aura isn't a bad one but you may want to avoid anything that relies on influencing other players against their will (implying that all students would be drawn to turn their heads, etc). This is for their sake and yours. If you were tossed up between shape shifting and this, I would suggest shape shifting as it does not impose on other players and can be controlled 100% by you!

Personality wise I don't see any major problems except that she may be in for rude awakenings about life when coming to Amity.

How would she react to a situation she can't buy her way out of?
How would she be if her super organized life became unruly against her wishes? Amity is an unpredictable place!
She may find that being a member of an old and illustrious family is meaningless or their 'fame' is not as extensive as she thinks. What if people haven't heard of her? What if other illustrious family's (there are others) do not recognize her name? Does she have any of her own resources or skills outside of her parents money?

Just curious though.. from your personality description she seems to relish in her posh lifestyle and infinite monetary resources.. yet in her reasons for attending school you state she may want to 'give up her lineage'. Why is that? Perhaps you should detail her opinions and reasons in her personality section?