[Q] Miyu Pumpkinheart the Bonbene Witch (LF Crits!)[Ready!]

[Rikku Takanashi]

AMITYVILLE ACADEMY ENROLLMENT FORM

Name: Miyu Pumpkinheart
Nicknames: Pumpkin Witch, Jack-O-Lantern Witch
Gender: Female
Age: 11

Faction: Reaper
Race: Bonbene Witch

Weapon: Pumpkin Wand
A Short shadow black hand staff with a Pumpkin Orange Crystal Orb at the end in the center of the Crystal Orb is a black Jack-o-Lantern face

Natural Ability: Familiar Summoning
Miyu can summon her familiar Toma who is a Pumpkin Orange Colored cat with shadow black eyes using a special spell she can summon him in a special form a Summoned Beast form which is bigger and stronger and good for battle
FEAR Ability: Pumpkin Fire
Fire is Miyu's magic of choice but typically she must use spells to bring it out and it's lacking the flow of fear that a Fear Ability allows but her Fear Ability Pumpkin Fire allows her to use her Fire directly in a powerful attack with all the Fear a Fear Ability Allows

Y1 - Pyra (Battle Cry)
Miyu gathers her fear into her Wand and forms a large ball of fire about the size of a large beach ball right infront of it then fires it at the opponent good for ranged attacks but viable up close to

(One special thing about Miyu's fire is it doesn't cause burns or chars cloths or hair or anything at most it will cover the cloths in soot but that would be it but it does hurt just like fire should and causes damage to Hp it just doesn't actually burn things however she can start a fire using her fire but only on things like wood or paper and only if she directly wants to (Think a Fire Type Pokemon Attack in the Anime/Video Games)

Physical Description:
Eye Color: Shadow Black
Hair Color/Style: Long Pumpkin Orange hair that comes to just below mid back with short uneven cut bangs
Skin Color: Light Tan
Height: 4.2
Clothing Style/Colors: Miyu wears Pumpkin Orange and Black either shadow or pitch black and usually for bottoms it will at least have the black fence like design at the bottom like her pants or stripes like her socks on it plus she always has her Witches hat (Will have reference when possible) She also usually goes without shoes
Extra: Her Hat is like this [x] Only its Pumpkin Orange Over all with the stripes alternating from Black to Pumpkin Orange the band around the hat is black and instead of a buckle theres a pumpkin crest just like the one off the pumpkin version of that hat
Color unity: The orange differs slightly on the different pieces of clothing in the example but the cloths are all the same orange color as the Puffy Pants (will have code later) also the gold metal buttons on the vest are made out of a shadow black metal
Her Bust: She has a small bust likely a low to medium A cup
References: Her outfit minus her Hat [x]

Personality: She is sweet, kind, brave, curious, playful, and jolly but knows when to be serious

Friendship - Miyu cherishes her friends greatly but she is more of a quality not quantity kind of person when it comes to making friends she doesn't want a large group of fake friends and will prefer to have a smaller more truer group of friends preferring Real, Best, and True Friends but good friends seem to find her and she often has a fairly large group of good friends it may take a little bit to earn her friendship but once you have you'll not find a truer friend

Cooking - Miyu loves to cook and is always experimenting her specialties are dishes involving Pumpkins and Sweets she's a fairly good cook and loves to cook for her friends her food preferences are she loves sweets and even some sour things but really dislikes super spicy or bitter things

Adventurous - Miyu loves going on adventures and exploring new places which sometimes gets her in trouble but she's always ready for the next adventure and a adventure for her doesn't have to be something big exploring a new place or having a great battle or even just trying something new is a adventure for her

Minipets - Beware when you walk into her room for you will find a whole menagerie of Minipets Miyu loves her Minipets and they are like family to her so try and harm one at your own risk the idea of eating Minipets sickens her and she will usually avoid a Minipet eater also never try and steal from her room for most of her Minipets keep watch and will attack any who they deem a threat which might sometimes be a problem

Battling - Miyu loves battling and can often be found training she doesn't get hung up on winning or losing (as long as it's not important) she just battles for the love of battling but she does like to win and will do her best (unless she has a reason not to) she feels if she doesn't do her best durring a battle then she's not doing the battle nor the opponent justic she just doesn't get too upset if she loses unless she has a good reason for it and over all just enjoys the battle

Her Hat - Miyu was literally born with her hat as sometimes happens with her specie of Reaper and she is a bit protective of it even though it's darn near indestructable the best way to get on her bad side is to take her hat from her or intentionally try and damage it that will get you a very annoyed Bonbene Witch she doesn't like to get her hat wet even though it's water proof so she will take it off when she swims or baths but worries about it while doing so she doesn't get upset however if it gets wet unintentionally as she knows it's water proof

Her Familiar - Miyu's Natural ability is to Summon a Familiar she first summoned Toma when she was five shortly after she first Summoned her weapon when Toma was first Summoned he was a little tiny kitten just as she was a little girl and as time went on they've grown up together they are best friends and another way to get on her bad side is to intentionally harm her familiar Miyu learned a ancient spell from Toma that allowed her to desummon him but then resummon him shortly after in a special way when he was resummoned he was in a summoned beast form which was bigger and stronger then his regular form so that he can aid her in battle

Why are they enrolled in Amityville Academy?
Miyu graduated early from her school with good grades and such she had heard about Amityville and wanted to join because while she loved the farm she wanted to be a FEAR collector and improve her fear her parents were unsure because she wasn't even a teen yet but because of her high grades and already strong fear they decided it was ok and sent in her application  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Pumpkinheart Family Info

Miyu comes from a long line of Pumpkin growers the Pumpkinhearts they are one of the major suppliers of pumpkins for Halloween originally they were two separate families that were in competition with each other but eventually merged into one large family

The kinds of pumpkins they grow range from your average Pumpkins to multicolored ones to ones with strange shapes to ones that are for eating and come in a verity of flavors to ones that are alive to even the special pumpkins used in breeding new Halloween creatured they also sell enchanted pumpkins and seeds for growing your own

Because of their profitable business they are well off in the money department but live rather humbly considering the amount of wealth they have and every member is raised to know that this wealth is not guarantied nor to be expected and comes from hard work and determination also that being wealthy does NOT make you better then others this mindset is passed down to each generation

The Pumpkinheart family tree is large and quite extended every branch that has children usually have two or three kids so there is always someone to take over there is five main branches and many many smaller branches of the family the farm is HUGE and their are five large houses on the farm with one in each corner and the largest in the very center this is where the head branch of the family lives each main branch has their own part of the farm and maintains it mostly themselves having free reign over what type of Pumpkins they want to grow there

Every member of the House specializes in growing at least one particular type of pumpkin which is usually effected by what their natural ability is

Miyu's Branch of the Family is the main Branch of the family and it consists of her Mother and Father plus their parents and her Brother however due to the size she they share the house with several of their cousins, aunts, uncles, etc

Her Family

James Pumpkinheart - Is Miyu's father he's gentle, friendly, and kind his family ALL of them means alot to him he has a good sense of humor and doesn't let much bother him so he's overall pretty laid back but does love a good adventure however while he is soft gentle in his speech and mannerisums he is brave and is fierce if need be especially when protecting his family he is a Pumpkinheart by birth and is the first born child so he inherited the main house and land he's very devoted to the farm and keeps things running smoothly

What he primarily grows is Pumpkins that come alive either as minipets or other creatures mostly because his natural ability is Familiar Summoning and his "weapon" is a large Pumpkin beast so he has a natural talent for being around creatures

Elizabeth(Liz) Pumpkinheart - Elizabeth known primarily as Liz is Miyu's Mother she is more bold, brave, rash, and adventurous then her husbin always loving a good battle and a good adventure however she is very friendly and generally modest over all she married into the family after meeting and falling in love with James in school both originally were supposed to be FEAR collectors and James younger brother was due to cover the farm raising however James despite having stronger FEAR then his brother prefered growing things and vice versa on his brothers part so after James told Liz what he did she found she loved it too and they decided to take over the farm instead

What she grows primarily is pumpkins that are enchanted and she actually helps others grow their pumpkins more then growing her own by using the various tools and such she's enchanted if one couldn't tell her Natural Ability is Enchanting

William (Wills) Pumpkinheart - Is Miyu's brother he is calm and cool most of the time he preferes to keep a level head, think things through, and think rationally rather then acting on impluse and just rushing into things he loves his younger sister dearly and they are the best of friends he's also a bit protective of her so if he's around a beef with her is a beef with him wether she wants it to be or not

The pumpkins he primarily grows are well just about everything however he primarily focuses on altered pumpkins like ones that are different colors or taste differently from a natural pumpkin he also helps his father with his Pumpkin creatures his natural ability is Potion Making so not only does he have a green arm and a natural way with animals so he can get the ingredients he needs but he has a natural talent for mixing potions and so has created and tweeked many formulas and potions for Pumpkin growing

(Will cover the Grandparents later)  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Bonbene Witch Info

Basic Description
Bonbene Witches are call Bonbene Witches not because they are good and don't belong in Halloween but because they are different from regular witches they refuse to have anything to do with demonology feeling its not right to bind a demon to their will they also have a greater range of power that each witch can be born with they are sort of jack of all trades in a sense though each Bonbene Witch usually specializes in a certain kind of magic

Natural Abilities
Familiar Summoning: This Natural Ability allows a Bonbene Witch to summon a familiar and have a Weapon or have two Familiars the powers and abilities as well as race of these Familiars are up to the Bonbene Witch that Summons them just as they're Familiar would be if it took the place of a Weapon
Enchanting: This Natural Ability allows a Bonbene Witch to be quite good at enchant things with spells and powers many Bonbene Witches with Enchanting as they're Natural Ability sell they're craft for money and often rival Enchanters in enchanting
Potion Making: This Natural Ability allows a Bonbene Witch to be quite good at potion making as well as growing and getting the ingredients used in making potions

Other Info
Born Accessory: No one remembers when it happened but long ago a Bonbene Witch came up with a blessing and blessed the whole Bonbene Witch Sub specie with it this strange blessing allows Bonbene Witches to be occasionally born with a Accessory of some type like a piece of jewelry or a hat or scarf or something this Accessory comes with some powerful enchantments already on it and often becomes the Bonbene Witches trade mark and most cherished item
Enchantments
Diamond Durability: This Enchantment allows the Accessory to be darn near indestructible without getting a scratch and it can even be used as a piece of good strong armor the Accessory also stands the tests of time not tattering or tearing or discoloring no matter the environment and often times the Accessory outlives the owner
Water Proof: This Enchantment makes the Accessory impervious to water but doesn't effect the texture of the object so if you didn't see the water bouncing off you wouldn't know it was water proof
Fire Proof: Like the Water Proof Enchantment you wouldn't know it was on the Accessory if you didn't see it sit in a blazing hot fire without even getting a scorch mark though if the fire is ungodly hot it can damage the Accessory but it takes a VERY hot fire to do that
Dirt Proof: Yes you heard right this Enchantment makes it so no form of dirt not liquids not food not even dust can attach itself to the object in question like the Water Proof Enchantment any dirt of any kind will just slide right off without sticking even smells won't stick though dust can settle on these objects when they are moved the dust comes right off
Growing: This Enchantment allows the Accessory to grow with the owner so that it always fits and looks perfectly in proportion to the owner otherwise it would be too big at birth and too small at adulthood
Voluntary Removal Only: This allows the Accessory to only be removed by the owner the wind nor water nor a person can remove the Accessory only the owner themselves or someone with the owners permission can remove the Accessory but the Accessory can move around but won't come off like a hat can't be taken off by a stray breeze but can be pulled down over the eyes or blown there if the hat is a looser fit
Return to me: If the Acessory is stolen from it's owner or even somehow destoryed the owner can wish with all they're heart for it's return and hold out their hand when they do it will reappear in they're hand if destoryed it will be good as new as if nothing ever happened to it  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Miyu's Spells
Fire - This spell can be done three different ways and each range in strength though the spell itself has a general level of strength theres also three other versions of this spell that are stronger Fira, Firaga, and Firaja but they are currently to difficult for her to use right now
Ball - Like Pyra Fire she summons a ball of flames infront of her Wand the ball however is only about the size of a dodgeball (Medium Stength)
Direct - She points her Wand at the opponent the air around the opponent will get hot suddenly then ignite engolfing the opponent in a small cloud of flames usually at chest hight (Low Strength)
Surge - She points her Wand at the opponent and says the spell when she does a small fire red ball of light will appear near the opponents foot and start moving so it makes a perfect circle around the opponent when the circle is complete the inside of the circle starts glowing a firey color suddenly a gyser of flames will burst from the circle underneath the opponent sometimes the opponent is throwen in the air other times if heavy enough they're subjected to being stuck in the gyser of flames until it stops which usually isn't long the nice thing about the surge method is it can be whispered and can actually be used as a sneak attack (High Strength)

Summon Lvl 1 - This is the basic level summoning spell for Summoning Toma in Summoned Beast form to Summon him Miyu desummons him then holds out her wand then says the spell when she does a small ball of flames appears infront of her wand the little flame then bursts to reveal a small fire colored spell circle which starts spinning and growing all the while having a almost Glass Panel/Stained Glass like look to it when it's big enough the spell circle will glow brightly and Toma in Summoned Beast form will burst through the spell circle which will shatter like glass into many shards and quickly fade away when he Is defeated(Hp hits zero) he simply collapes and starts to fade away as he's desummoned he can be resummoned immidently but he'll be really tired and unable to battle or help much  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Her Familiar
Name: Tounasu Toma (Toma)
Nicknames: Pum, Kitter, Tou, Jacks, Pumcat
Gender: Male
Fear: Fire Element
Appearence: A young pumpkin orange house cat with shadow black eyes (the white part of his eyes are white) He also has these markings [x] (but with regular cat ears)
Personality: Sweet, Kind, Playful, Jolly, Brave, but also knows when to be Serious, knowingly wise

Friendship - Like Miyu Toma cherishes friendship Miyu is one of his best friends and he is friends with alot of her friends as well as having his own he's also close friends with all her minipets

Adventurous - Toma is adventurous just like Miyu is and loves exploring places often going off on his own to explore and get into things though he preferes exploring with Miyu he's more then willing to have a adventure with a friend also

Talkitive - Like many Familiars Toma can speak the general language of halloween he's also strangely well versed in other languages something he was born with

Minipet talker? - Yes Toma can speak Minipet and often translates for her as well as relaying messages from the Minipets

Playful - Toma is still very much a kitten at heart and will be the first to tell you so he loves playing and running around the room playing with the minipets he also likes leaving her room to find others to play with and also has a tendency as most cats do to find the one person who wants nothing to do with him and wants to play with them

Cuddly - As much as Toma loves to run and play he loves a good warm lap or shoulder or chest to lay on and just cuddle if your a friend of his or Miyu's then expect at some point to find a Pumpkin Orange Cat in your lap wanting pets and skritches

Wise - Despite being born when he was first summoned Toma has alot of ancient knowledge stored in him which he pulls out when he needs it even if he didn't know he knew it and he's actually the one that has taught Miyu most of her spells including the Summoning Spell

Summoned Beast: Toma knows what specie he is he is a creature known as a Summoned Beast Familiar which is a creature that has a regular form and a Summoned Beast Form which often helps aid in combat when needed or desired as the Summoner gets stronger the Summoned beast Familiar gets stronger when the Summoner has reach a certain level of strength they will gain access to the next level of the Summoning spell which Summons a bigger and stronger form of the Familiar then before there usually is only three maybe 4 levels to this

Current Summoned Beast Form: Toma is still Pumpkin Orange with Shadow Black Eyes in his Summoned Beast form but he is the size of a Cheetah and has almost the bulk of a Leopard he's pretty light on his feet and fast while having good strength as well as magic he's too small yet to ride but can carry Miyu out of danger a short distence  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Battle info on her and her familiar

Basics

Miyu Is quite light on her feet and quite acrobatic for a mage type she's pretty agile and doesn't need to stand still to do her spells the only exception to this is when she does her FEAR Attack while charging it she can move but to fire it she has to stand still Miyu primarily focuses on the magic attack side of battles

Toma can fight outside of his Summoned Beast form and like Miyu in those times he's primarily a magic attacker but his magic is much weaker then hers and its usually not a good idea for him to fight like this if he can help it because its easier to desummon him then when he's in his Summoned Beast form he usually only fights like this if he has no other choice

When Toma is in his Summoned Beast form things are different he's bigger and stronger both physically and magically however in his Summon Beast form he's primarily a physical attacker and rarely uses his magic he covers the physical attack side of things usually in both forms like most cats are Toma is very fast, agile, and acrobatic however when he is in Summoned Beast form he is a smidge less acrobatic and agile simply due to his bulk and extra muscle

Important things to note

Toma
Toma ISN'T a weapon he's not a manifestation of Miyu's FEAR he is truely a Summoned Familiar who's primary goal is to be a guide, friend, and compainion to Miyu as such he does NOT boost her FEAR in any way that is what her weapon is for

How They Fight Together
Miyu can fight on her own Toma can fight on his own and they can both fight together when fighting alone or with Miyu Toma's HP is half of what Miyu's is but he is not a seprate char In his Summoned Beast Form for every hit he takes Miyu loses Hp because it takes Energy to keep him in that form so when his Hp runs out she can't keep him summoned and he is desummoned and she is left with only half her Hp also if Miyu loses half her HP he is desummoned even if he doesn't take a hit due to her not having the spare energy to keep him summoned outside of his Summoned Beast form Toma can't really fight due to being rather frail compared to being in his Summoned Beast form and so he'll go down with most decent hits

When they fight together both their attacks count as one attack not seprate attacks so if they are fighting together and Toma attacks but not Miyu it counts as Miyu's attack, if Miyu attacks without Toma attacking its still her attack, and if they both attack the two attacks are combioned into one damage wise  

[Rikku Takanashi]

- R e s e r v e d -  

[Enoh Love]

Rikku Takanashi

Hi Rikku!

I have a couple crits/suggestions for you:

Something to keep in mind:

Y1s are the bottom of the totem pole when it comes to powers and abilities, and needless to say, you have a lot of powers and abilities listed here, which is reading as incredibly over powered. Keep in mind that as a Y1 - even a Y1 Bonbene Witch - there will be a lot of restrictions. Start modest and small, and slowly work up to something more powerful throughout her time at Amity.

Try to keep her powers and abilities down to:

ONE Natural Ability: Either Familiar Summoning, OR Born Accessory - not both. If you choose the Born Accessory, keep in mind that it can't be totally indestructible, and will have to be limited in power as well. Again, Y1s are weak and have little going for them. If you choose the familiar summoning, Miyu can simply be possessive of their hat. Even with the Familiar Summoning, Toma would be as weak and restricted as Miyu is, because he's technically a Y1 too, since he's an extension of her. Plus, as a side note, I don't believe that even familiars can converse with minipets. Maybe understand body language to get a general idea, but not flat-out speak to.

ONE FEAR: This would be only ONE of the spells you had listed OR the summoned beast form of Toma - not both.

The more I read her the more I suggest you nix the Pumpkin Wand entirely, and make Toma her Reaper 'Weapon', which would free up the Natural Ability to be her 'Born Accessory', which would really just be a very important (to her) hat that perhaps creates a mild (IC) boost to her FEAR, and her FEAR can continue to be the Pyra attack you have listed, just minus the wand.  

[Rikku Takanashi]

Enoh Love

Thankies for the crit! But I guess ill need to clarify some things ^^;

Her spells aren't her FEAR ability those are her regular attacks they don't have the FEAR in them a Fear ability has its like a spell casters version of a punch so they only deal regular damage Miyu is a fire magic based user but she can't manipulate fire the way say a fire demon can she can only use her fear infused fire when using her FEAR ability and the only other time she can use fire is through fire based spells

Also the Born Accessory Isn't a natural ability its a natural trait of Bonbene Witches like how in some specie of demons some are born with horns and some are not plus the accessory is destoryable its just hard and time won't destroy or damage it

When a Bonbene witch dissapates the accesory goes with them I should fix that because if a creature of halloween just dissapates for good when they offically die their accessory would go with them

Well I now know a few things I need to fix and clarify Thankies! Will do it next time I get to the library  

[its me debz]

Hey there! She's such a cutie! heart Just thought I'd put in my 2c as well on the lore of the world of halloween. smile

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Natural Ability: Familiar Summoning
Miyu can summon her familiar Toma who is a Pumpkin Orange Colored cat with shadow black eyes using a special spell she can summon him in a special form a Summoned Beast form which is bigger and stronger and good for battle

This is a little too OP for a y1 natural ability! Please save the 'special stronger' variant as a y2 upgrade to her natural ability. smile

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they are one of the major suppliers of pumpkins for Halloween

Pumpkins often come into natural existence via hopeful parents or something else-- a major supplier is fine, but your backstory (her family and the rival family) can't have a monopoly on the growth of pumpkins! After all, pumpkins are the backbone of Halloween society biggrin !

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The born accessory

This is simply too powerful. Something like this would be a custom artifact. There are such a thing as racial abilities, but those tend to be involved with the body of the student. Wings, for instance, generally means that someone can fly. My old student, Aleria, and Tig's Aymet, have connections to frost in their species. As such, they were both often very cold to the touch--freezing, in fact!

However, if i wanted to make that cold affect the environment *around* aleria, that would have made it a natural ability. Since the born accessory extends beyond the reign of the witch's body, and has an assortment of other nifty powers, it'd be best off as an artifact rather than something classified as a species ability.

Rikku Takanashi