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Keeping in mind that I read this from your deviantArt page and thus the layout of the text might be different from one computer monitor to another, I offer the following corrections...
Title - Eposode (Episode)
Paragraph 1, 4th line, 4th word - writs (possibly wrists)
Paragraph 4, 1st line, 15th word - hand (possibly handing)
Paragraph 6, 1st line, 21st word - bored (???)
Paragraph 6, 2nd line, 3rd word - toke (possibly took)
Paragraph 11, 1st line, 9th word - greening (possibly gleaming)
Paragraph 11, 2nd line, 20th word - pray (possibly prey)
Paragraph 16, 1st line, 22nd word - flying (possibly hitting)
Paragraph 20, 5th line, 16th word - here (possibly her)
Paragraph 32, 1st line, 6th word - off (possibly of)
Paragraph 33, 1st line, last word - pleated (possibly pleaded)
Overall, I liked the story. Other than the possible typos I listed above, I also noticed a few places that should have commas for proper pausing and a couple of missing "Article's" like "a", "an" or "the" as in paragraph 34 "...giving her quick kiss...".
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