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Tangelo_Effect

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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 10:43 am

Fin

As I pull my head out

A voice speaks to me

It says my future is calling me

The fault line binds me to where I lay

Broken and misguided

The end is near

I can feel the dense fog roll in

And my bones

Frail and fragile

Because I neglect my calling

Waist deep in the sand

I beg for mercy

But the end is near

Beware of the eyes, all the while

Beware of the eyes

Falling down to the next floor

I push to break free

You stole myself

You thieve my mind to find your knowledge

You bastards

You rob me and blame me

My shadow lies true

Another song plays on

Why would you do this?

And in my darkest moment

You pull me through

And I have misjudged you

The eyes hurt for a reason

Posted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 2:58 pm

I like it alot, but I don't get what the poem means, maybe it's just way over my head or whatever.

The transaction between you lying in the crevice and talking about the ones that robbed you didn't make alot of sense

I don't know what else to say redface

(It takes awhile for me to figure out things, so it's probably me)

Gomer Tymur

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GabbySilverwood

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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 7:25 am

Nice. And way to take advantage of the avaliable resources.

For the record, and Gomer, this is where suspension of disbeleif comes into play. You just have to remember that he's not being litteral.
He feels like he has fallen, and failed horribly at something.
Then he hears someone talking to him. And he begins to feel like they are tormenting him for his failure. (That would be the sand reference.)
So he lashes out at them, but they don't go away, and they keep messing with him. And he gets so upset at them that he doesn't even notice that they are rescuing him until it's over with.
And then there is the last line. That one probably ment every single one of the various things it could mean.

And that's what I get out of it.

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