Mmmm, a very crappy poem -- I take criticism.

[s p a z z z !]

mmm, I know it's not too good, just wanted to see what you thought. It was a "time" theme for school, so ....

Twilight

The moon is shining brighter than before,
Every creature alive wishes there were more.
At the end of another chaotic night,
We come to a time called Twilight.

When the darkness comes, you know it's the end,
Only you are left to fend.
Seeping through the power of the night,
Twilight gives you power and might.

Twilight is a time when the demons come out,
They laugh and run and spin and shout.
But a hint of mischief settled in their eyes,
Trouble starts when the angels answer the demons' cries.

Chasing away the devils in a neat, white mass,
Their pureness cleansing the long, green grass.
The sing away your troubles, their voices so pure,
And then leave the valley, their business no more.

Twilight is the time when we make amends,
Put everything behind us and once again be friends.
Caressing the dark with a gentle light,
We come to a time called Twilight.

 

[Moth Wrangler]

Well, personally, I love it.
I can't really write deep poetry because, I think I'm pretty shallow...
And a poem like that... It feeds the imagination.
(If you know what I mean.)

 

[switchfootfan5]

I like the personification and metaphorical usage. If I'm correct, the angels and demons represent the cross between lightness and dark, day and night, that we have at twilight. If I'm wrong then guess I'm getting too deep, and please correct me. The rhyming meter was a little off, but other than that it was a decent poem.
I give it an A.  

[Average Evil Meteor]

It isn't that bad at all. I must admit, I agree with switch, I'm not too much sure on the rhyming, but it's a really gentle poem. I'd give it a B+.

Jaikai
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