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this is my first poem that hasn't had "roses are red, violets are blue" at the beginning. please critique so i can get better. ________________________________________________ escape
flying out the window, running out the door, swimming in the ocean, this and so much more.
tryin to escape, pressures and concerns, escape to an island, never to return.
living in peace there, till someone calls my name, i'll go back to the faulty world, where i'll never be the same.
people's opinions change, they love and then they hate, teasing till someone gets hurt, it's all a part of fate.
so i'll go back to my land, where people just don't care, who wears what and how they look, or the colors of your eyes and hair.
this is my land, called escape, now you can have one to, it's just a place where you feel safe, no matter what you do.
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