Poetry Corner

[Kitanya_Rose]

This thread is for poetry you have written yourself, not poems written by other people.

Post pieces here, get feedback, ask questions, share creative processes and ideas.  

[vesta_vesves_star]

Wow first post
>.>
<.<
I know it's slightly creepy weird but bare with me

It all seemed to linger in
An endless darkness with awful din
Running screaming it did not go
Even after we all said no
By Apollo's rays they did divine
A shot of darkness a taste of time  

[PhoenixMoonStar]

vesta_vesves_star

Wow first post
>.>
<.<
I know it's slightly creepy weird but bare with me

It all seemed to linger in
An endless darkness with awful din
Running screaming it did not go
Even after we all said no
By Apollo's rays they did divine
A shot of darkness a taste of time

I really like it.. but I like darker poetry. I think it's much more interesting. You've got good imagry and good rhyme!  

[SilverMercury0892]

vesta_vesves_star

Wow first post
>.>
<.<
I know it's slightly creepy weird but bare with me

It all seemed to linger in
An endless darkness with awful din
Running screaming it did not go
Even after we all said no
By Apollo's rays they did divine
A shot of darkness a taste of time

WOW. I loooooove it!! I think I'll save it, but I'll put your screenname as the author smile  

[SilverMercury0892]

Small and Harmless

Small and harmless,
one would say.
With their dust, and flowers,
and feathery wings! Don’t be fooled
by what you see. . .
Fairies are mischievous
things!
Obscured by mushrooms, flowers,
and leaves, these creatures live in hollow, oak trees! They host
outrageous parties; dancing
under the moon, stars, the inky sky.
Then they sleep all day, letting the sun go by.
Fairies are like bothersome pests,
that is, if you run into their nests!
They’ll pull and tangle up your hair,
and attack you so you
have no air!
Never trusts a fairy’s word.
All they want is your milk and bread,
then they’ll fly away like a haste little bird!
They’ll ravage homes, and eat your goods.
You’ll have to case them back to
the woods!
And all the way, they’ll giggle
and banter. They always
have fun
committing
such slander!
A warning to
you if you bake pies:
Watch your goods, or otherwise,
all you’ll hear are the flutter of wings; soon enough they’ll be gone in a zing!
And you’ll end up like a puppet on
string.  

[Aleria Carventus]

Lost

Last year everything was stable,
This year my world is spinning around.
I don’t know when it’s going to stop,
It’s like I’ve got no control.

I feel like my life is out of control,
There is nothing I can do anymore
I’ve walked so far from my path
I’ll never get back to it

I can’t believe I’ve lost the way forever,
I’ll never get back, I can never find it
I’m lost, never to find my way back,
How hard I try it‘ll still be the same.

Maybe one day I’ll find my way again,
Because everything changes,
No matter what everything changes,
Time will change anything.

That’s why I’ve changed, I will change,
Until the end of time, things will change,
The world will crumble and fall,
All because of change
And one day, before then I will find my way.

 

[antihippiesoldier]

i wonder if i can find any of mine.......




Killer:
you canot kill which you did not make
you ask for life he gives you death
he walks with you in life's dead pathe road ends here
he calls to you





JOIN
Join the rich, join the proud, join the living, and join the ranks of the dead, make us enemy, make us friends join the ranks of the dead.

live, die join the people of the sky, wish for life, wish for death..

a war of light, a war of sadness, the panic, the fright, the war of life.

living life, living long, hoping for forgiveness hoping not to fall.

join the ranks join the proud till your proud army crumbles and falls.









sadly i made this one to make someone i knew angry.

ImMoRtAl

Are we immortal, are we not? Are we living, are we dead? God gives immortality, is it realy fair? God gives immortality, is it any good? God gives immortality, what if Satin did?







NeW

new life, new world
new guns, new wars
new damn goverment
new world order
new problems
All over again.  

[antihippiesoldier]

come on, dont tell me its THAT bad.  

[vesta_vesves_star]

Oh sorry Anti-kun I realy like it. 3nodding  

[Opaque_Dreams]

I'm New At The Whole Guild Forum Thing Especially On Gaia redface but i am a writer... so uh... here goes...

The Witches Way

Alone and forgotten I hug my book of spells
There's nothing more to tell
Just a lonely Wiccan sitting in the dark
I have no more smart remarks

Everyone ridicules me and judges me for what i'm not
But there's no deference in everything we're taught
What I do is not much deferent form you
There are no converts I wish to persue

If you cut me I will bleed red blood
I don't think i'm such a stude
The only deference between us is how we perceive the devine
But thats's not a good excuse on why we can't hang out some time

I worship the elements and praise the Lord And Lady
But we've descussed that already
I have nothing else to say
Now I hope you will judge another way


..... be harsh.... this was one of the first poems i made and i never got any feed back on it. so yeah.......


 

[Kitanya_Rose]

Lost_Wanderer0916

I'm New At The Whole Guild Forum Thing Especially On Gaia redface but i am a writer... so uh... here goes...

The Witches Way

Alone and forgotten I hug my book of spells
There's nothing more to tell
Just a lonely Wiccan sitting in the dark
I have no more smart remarks

Everyone ridicules me and judges me for what i'm not
But there's no deference in everything we're taught
What I do is not much deferent form you
There are no converts I wish to persue

If you cut me I will bleed red blood
I don't think i'm such a stude
The only deference between us is how we perceive the devine
But thats's not a good excuse on why we can't hang out some time

I worship the elements and praise the Lord And Lady
But we've descussed that already
I have nothing else to say
Now I hope you will judge another way


..... be harsh.... this was one of the first poems i made and i never got any feed back on it. so yeah.......

Hmmm.. not bad at all. I normally don't say things about poems because I can't write them... but the timing, is it? Pattern? Beat? (beats me.. that thing with the meter or whatever) seems to mix a little from line to line and stanza to stanza, so if you were looking for that, I'd say it's a little off.

Your third stanza, second like.. Not really sure what you were going for on the last word. I'd never heard it, and tried to look it up, but that didn't help. and the "ude" and "ood" sounds are kind of off for the rhyme.

Everything else looks good to me.  

[VampireKikyo]

To a Father

I remember when you were here. You seemed so shy, but I know you loved us, even though you never said, you always showed. I still remember your face, and I still remember that smile you had as you lay in the coffin. It was the same one you had on when you were hiding something from us. I wonder what you were hiding when you left? I remember how mother looked when we got the news, how my sister went as white as a ghost, and how I automatically knew that something was wrong when the police man came to the door with our friends. You knew I loved you, even though I would push you away. How you knew I will never know.

by: VampireKikyo

I wrote this in Grade 11..three years after my father passed away...it's been four years now and on May 28th of next year it'll be five.  

[vesta_vesves_star]

VampireKikyo

To a Father

I remember when you were here. You seemed so shy, but I know you loved us, even though you never said, you always showed. I still remember your face, and I still remember that smile you had as you lay in the coffin. It was the same one you had on when you were hiding something from us. I wonder what you were hiding when you left? I remember how mother looked when we got the news, how my sister went as white as a ghost, and how I automatically knew that something was wrong when the police man came to the door with our friends. You knew I loved you, even though I would push you away. How you knew I will never know.

by: VampireKikyo

I wrote this in Grade 11..three years after my father passed away...it's been four years now and on May 28th of next year it'll be five.

that's sad, it's a realy good note 3nodding