Buuuuh... My poems... -Feedback, anyone?

[[Sarah~fairy]]

[1]
Once there was a little girl
who loved a superhero.
She lived a life of loneliness,
unloved and all alone.

Her love, the superhero,
promised that he'd love her true,
So the little girl was loved again,
with the universe by her side.

But then her hero left again,
fallen for his Lowis Laine.
Now the girl was sad again,
loveless and alone.

But she still loves her superhero,
never letting go.
And she won't admit it,
but she needs him to save her again.



[2]
It seems the more I think of it,
the more I come to see
I miss those days so terribly,
when you were in love with me.

But I know those days are gone,
and I won't get second chances,
but at least I can still be your friend
and steal some of your attention.



[3]
Thank you for the time you spent
Teaching us to read.
Thank you for the books we read,
Though we read without great speed.

Thank you for the poems we read,
And those we learned to write.
Thank you for the Shakespeare,
That soon became our plight.

You are my favorite teacher
And it's you that I will miss,
When that diploma's in my hand
And it's time to reminisce.

In conclusion,
I'd like to say,
I love you Mrs. Hull.
For all you did to help me,
However minuscule and small,
They were the things that helped me,
And I thank you for them all.



[4]
Till death do us part
Means nothing to me.
You are my true love
And it's you that I see
That till death do us part
Longer will I love thee.



[5]
Good bye again,
now and forever,
my dearest friend,
who will be ever.  

[farfromsight06]

I liked them all. Except for the first one. I like the idea, but it doesn't really sound like a poem. But besides that, they are good. smile  

[SiCKittie]

good job.  

[The Love Turtle]

Exellent mrgreen  

[krikit_my_dog_XP]

nice. Very impressive, too. lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala.................loved it.  

[Grim Joke]

Sweet ^^ I liked number 4 and 2 the best biggrin