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I love writing poetry. And I try to write at least one poem per day. I'm a big fan of metaphors, but I know some people are not. If you are not a big fan of metaphors, please don't kill yourself trying to figure my poems out. But, I'm not asking you to tell me what I think my poems mean. I'd like you to give me your impressions of what you feel about my poetry. Critiques are very much welcomed. Thank you. heart

I am currently working on a series of short poems I like to call "Fragments". I'm hoping that they will soon create a large poem, but also I want them to be significant on their own.

Friday, September 1, 2006:

Fragment 00/04
Shunning the field broken by Wave.
The shadowed girl whispers,
"Surely, I will return."
Alas, the truth unbeknownst.
Awaiting her at journey's end;
Eternal mourning for her land.

Saturday September 2, 2006:

Fragment 01/04
When the finger points to the
yonder moon,
The fool will not look at the fingertip.

Sunday, September 3, 2006

Fragment 02/04
The whole cannot be changed.
We have already lost that chance.
Because the time left to us was short,
We were mistaken in our path.
But now do we realize,
We should change not the whole,
But the parts.

Monday, September 4, 2006

Fragment 03/04
Wave soars and shrouds the eyes.
No means to fight an omnipresent force,
The shadowless ones just grieve.
Why must it be a Wave?
Divide, if it would just...
Then retaliate, we may.

Thanks for the positive comment. I don't expect many people to help critique. Metaphors are tricky and I've seen people die slowly trying to figure them out. Thanks for the support though.