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 Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 3:14 pm
Cheated
Hold me with your hateful hands,
Capture me with your hateful plans.
Love me with you violent eyes,
leave me with your soft goodbyes.
Accidental
Struggling against
the coming wave.
Hoping on
false wishes.
Sharing hearts
raging within.
Willed against
naive knowledge.
Afraid to admit
to the uncontrolled sin
the unperishable guilt.
The primary cause,
the unpredictable effect.
Comments are welcome.
Or anti-comments, because comments sounds too hopeful on my part.
Honestly, I think I'm a shitload better at writing stories than poetry.
O:
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Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 3:15 pm
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Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 3:25 pm
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Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 10:43 pm
I enjoyed reading your poetry, Forever. Although it seems a tad depressing when I look back at it and scan the stanzas. But, all poetry must have a basis, or else it means nothing. Good job and keep up the incredible writing.
On a side note, I'd like to inquire about your signature. The poem I read in your signature was (by far) the most marvellous piece of work I've read in quite a long time. I hope you don't mind if I write it down. It had touched my heart in a way that no other writing has (yet.)
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 7:13 pm
Actually, it's a song. One of my favorites.
You aren't a huge fan of country music, are you?
It's a song by Toby Keith. (Country basically) I guess I should have put that in my Sig.. ::needs to change it::
I love country songs because the good ones are always done incredibly well.
Please, don't give me any credit.
Thank you for the comments on my own stuff, and, yes, a tad depressing, but at the time I was a tad depressed, so I suppose it just fits a mood.
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 7:15 pm
You're right, I'm not a big fan of country but I do know that artists name. I would like to know what you think of my poetry that I posted in this subforum.
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 7:16 pm
Mihaii You're right, I'm not a big fan of country but I do know that artists name. I would like to know what you think of my poetry that I posted in this subforum. Well, then I'm off to find it.
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Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 7:20 pm
.Never.Forever. Mihaii You're right, I'm not a big fan of country but I do know that artists name. I would like to know what you think of my poetry that I posted in this subforum. Well, then I'm off to find it. Thank you.
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