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PostPosted: Sun Jan 14, 2007 1:51 am
I haven't felt like this for quite a while,I do fear many things, My heart takes in speed when I start to dile, It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring, because thers that one chance it could be you, That wonderful feeling of starting over,with you it feels so true, please save me from this eternal slumber, I dont want to be lonely anymore,sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,these sleepless nights that I have endured,and my heart in which it was stolen,can you blame the nightly shore,but before I ask you a simple question,theres something else I would like to say,when I look into your eyes theres this connection,Im so surprised by this gaze,I can feel this warm security of affection,I cant take it any longer,I want to be apart of your life,I want us to be together,Would you do me the honors of being my wife?  
PostPosted: Sun Jan 14, 2007 1:37 pm
It's nice, but might help a little if you put it in poem form. As in stanzas and phrases and such.

And FYI... Dile = Dial  

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 14, 2007 1:39 pm
Dizzy360
I haven't felt like this for quite a while,I do fear many things, My heart takes in speed when I start to dile, It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring, because thers that one chance it could be you, That wonderful feeling of starting over,with you it feels so true, please save me from this eternal slumber, I dont want to be lonely anymore,sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,these sleepless nights that I have endured,and my heart in which it was stolen,can you blame the nightly shore,but before I ask you a simple question,theres something else I would like to say,when I look into your eyes theres this connection,Im so surprised by this gaze,I can feel this warm security of affection,I cant take it any longer,I want to be apart of your life,I want us to be together,Would you do me the honors of being my wife?


For example:

I haven't felt like this for quite a while,
I do fear many things,
My heart takes in speed when I start to dile,
It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring,
because thers that one chance it could be you,
That wonderful feeling of starting over,
with you it feels so true,
please save me from this eternal slumber,
I dont want to be lonely anymore,
sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,
these sleepless nights that I have endured,
and my heart in which it was stolen,
can you blame the nightly shore,
but before I ask you a simple question,
theres something else I would like to say,
when I look into your eyes theres this connection,
Im so surprised by this gaze,
I can feel this warm security of affection,
I cant take it any longer,
I want to be apart of your life,
I want us to be together,
Would you do me the honors of being my wife?  
PostPosted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 11:40 am
Thanks for the advice, it was well appreciated and soon it will be taken to consideration.  

Compressed_Memories


Cheerfulhope

PostPosted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 12:54 pm
LostInTheRed
Dizzy360
I haven't felt like this for quite a while,I do fear many things, My heart takes in speed when I start to dile, It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring, because thers that one chance it could be you, That wonderful feeling of starting over,with you it feels so true, please save me from this eternal slumber, I dont want to be lonely anymore,sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,these sleepless nights that I have endured,and my heart in which it was stolen,can you blame the nightly shore,but before I ask you a simple question,theres something else I would like to say,when I look into your eyes theres this connection,Im so surprised by this gaze,I can feel this warm security of affection,I cant take it any longer,I want to be apart of your life,I want us to be together,Would you do me the honors of being my wife?


For example:

I haven't felt like this for quite a while,
I do fear many things,
My heart takes in speed when I start to dile,
It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring,
because thers that one chance it could be you,
That wonderful feeling of starting over,
with you it feels so true,
please save me from this eternal slumber,
I dont want to be lonely anymore,
sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,
these sleepless nights that I have endured,
and my heart in which it was stolen,
can you blame the nightly shore,
but before I ask you a simple question,
theres something else I would like to say,
when I look into your eyes theres this connection,
Im so surprised by this gaze,
I can feel this warm security of affection,
I cant take it any longer,
I want to be apart of your life,
I want us to be together,
Would you do me the honors of being my wife?


~~
I haven't felt like this for quite a while,
I do fear many things,
My heart takes in speed when I start to dial,
It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring,
because there's that one chance it could be you,

That wonderful feeling of starting over,
with you it feels so true,
please save me from this eternal slumber,
I don't want to be lonely anymore,
sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,
these sleepless nights that I have endured,
and my heart in which it was stolen,
can you blame the nightly shore,

but before I ask you a simple question,
theres something else I would like to say,
when I look into your eyes theres this connection,
I'm so surprised by this gaze,
I can feel this warm security of affection,
I cant take it any longer,
I want to be apart of your life,
I want us to be together,
Would you do me the honors of being my wife?
~~

sweatdrop Sorry, I couldn't help myself. On the other hand, the poem is pretty good. ^-^  
PostPosted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 4:32 pm
Thank you  

Compressed_Memories


Compressed_Memories

PostPosted: Tue Jan 16, 2007 12:51 am
I haven't felt like this for quite a while,
I do fear many things,
My heart takes in speed when I start to dial,
It drives me crazy to hear the phone ring,
because there's that one chance it could be you,

That wonderful feeling of starting over,
with you it feels so true,
please save me from this eternal slumber,
I don't want to be lonely anymore,
sitting here by myself waiting for something to happen,
these sleepless nights that I have endured,
and my heart in which it was stolen,
can you blame the nightly shore,

but before I ask you a simple question,
theres something else I would like to say,
when I look into your eyes theres this connection,
I'm so surprised by this gaze,
I can feel this warm security of affection,
I cant take it any longer,
I want to be apart of your life,
I want us to be together,
Would you do me the honors of being my wife?  
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