Twist fanfiction of vk

[Tacara2011]

^.^  

[DeniedUltraSex]

It's cute! -^__^-

Errr, might want to spell check though!  

[Mira_Kumiko]

O.o You did that very horribly.. It is as if you were listing things..  

[Sunny Teddy]

Let's get these teen hearts beating. Faster, faster.

You guys, stop. That's just plain rude.

If you're going to say something about the writing that's different from "It was really good," then you might as well give her some real feedback. Just saying "It sucks" won't help her make it better, and just because it wasn't the best piece of writing in the world doesn't mean you can jack it up.

Try to be a bit considerate.

So testosterone boys and harlequin girls, will you dance to this beat, and hold a lover close?

 

[=Aural Madness=]

i agree. i think it is going in a good direction. all i think that need done is to make it clear who is talking and doind actions, and read for spelling. it wasn't bad though.  

[Jill2282]

I like the idea of it. You should clean it up just a little bit, but as it's in 'play-format' it's fine the way the dialoge is set up. I think you did an excellent job.  

[Sunny Teddy]

Lynx Saint Keiya

Well....I said no offense......

Let's get these teen hearts beating. Faster, faster.

Don't get started with meee~! Rules and regulatiooons~! *sing-song*

So testosterone boys and harlequin girls, will you dance to this beat, and hold a lover close?

 

[Jill2282]

Hahaha.... what? Anyhoo, it would be cool if you continued it!  

[Dinosaur Boo]

Lynx Saint Keiya

Well....I said no offense......

Aha. To say that something sucks is very offensive if you ask me. If someone walked up to you and said, "You're ugly. No offense..." Wouldn't you be offended anyway? I rest my case. xDD

But anyway. I liked it. There are some spelling errors, but hey. I make spelling errors all the time. xD And when I read over my work I usually correct the errors in my brain. I'd be a terrible editor.