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Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 4:23 pm
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Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 9:03 pm
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Posted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 2:04 pm
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Posted: Thu Jan 25, 2007 6:41 pm
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Posted: Fri Jan 26, 2007 8:15 pm
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Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 12:53 am
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Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 9:04 am
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Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 1:58 pm
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Posted: Sun Jan 28, 2007 6:20 pm
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Overall, its a nice poem. And I am giving you this critisim on behalf of an English major. Please dont take it the wrong way for I do not intend this to be rude. The rhyming is a little much. I noticed the ABA, ABAA patten which is ok, and common. You have talent, I dont know if this is the only way you write or not, but a lot of really good poems dont have to rhym, as long they are still beautiful. If this is the way you love to write, then go for it though, do what ever makes you happy, as I said before, Im speaking on behalf of an English major.
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Posted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 12:41 pm
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