This is posted on Fictionpress.com, but I thought I'd give it a try here. Please give me negative comments in specific, so I know what to change. Postive comments are also welcome, but TELL ME WHAT EXACTLY YOU LIKE! I'm tired of, "I like it, it's good." That's not what I'm looking for.
The Dewdrop
Frozen sunshine trapped in glass
Twilight reflection, invisible
More than just water on grass
Metaphor invincible
Bubble of warm frost
Summer rains wash it all away
The dewdrop is so lost
Just like us someday
Mirror images everywhere
Modified by wind and waves
Smallest drop of water there
Only sitting there unpaved
Untouched by all pollution
Don't ever change
There could be a solution
That's never within range
Like the single dewrop showed us
that humanity can change.
Gaian Grammar Guild
The Gaian Grammar Guild is a refuge for the literate, a place for them to post and read posts without worrying about the nonsensical ones.
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