December Sky

[hippiepoet1964]

The sunset and frosty weather inspired this piece.


DECEMBER SKY

Crimson skies bleeding out
in shades of blue and green
ecchymotic
hematomas
Sky has been fulled
Pockets of white and gray
fill my vision

Tips of sentinel's
fingers
glisten with frozen
silver light
shining endlessly
capturing small
images of colored
reflections
Sky and earth
melding into one
small
glistening
speck
of hydrogen and oxygen
captured in time
as so many past

Tell me it shall
never end

Cold air
sucking breath away

Meaningless I am
to this





Laura Horner
12-2-06



Copyright © deadheadpoet ... [2006-12-03 11:50:51]  

[Lord_Skyy]

Oooh, bloody words. Beautifully bloody words. I admit I had to go to the dictionary for ecchymotic. xd That's a very ... vivid analogy. It makes me feel like I'm under the December Sky... tranquil and relaxed. Though I normally don't like lines with few words, I think you entered the next line each time at the perfect time. Instead of breaking up your flow, it gives it even more character. Wonderful image of snow.

I loved the way you ended it. Your poetry gives us novice poets insipiration, as it is an extraordinary example of what we may be able to write one day.  

[hippiepoet1964]

Lord_Skyy

Oooh, bloody words. Beautifully bloody words. I admit I had to go to the dictionary for ecchymotic. xd That's a very ... vivid analogy. It makes me feel like I'm under the December Sky... tranquil and relaxed. Though I normally don't like lines with few words, I think you entered the next line each time at the perfect time. Instead of breaking up your flow, it gives it even more character. Wonderful image of snow.

I loved the way you ended it. Your poetry gives us novice poets insipiration, as it is an extraordinary example of what we may be able to write one day.

Lord_Skyy, I am truly honored by your comment. redface Nature is one of my greatest inspirations in writing.