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Ballad To A Fallen Angel

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AshIynn

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 3:04 pm


A flash of black,
The gleaming of bright green eyes,
Brown hair cascading,
Pale skin fading,
Under the spray,
Of a falling waterfall,
Sinking through,
The Rocky surface,
Eyes widening,
Mouth wide open,
Her wings fluttering uselessly,
The cold waters making way

Oh, my Royalness,
Let me surround you,
In these cold depths,
Let me break you,
Destroy you,
Snuff out that pretty little lie

Surely it beats these demon black wings,
Your old white set now tainted,
Surely it beats your sun bleached hair,
Your old complete brown growing streaks of blonde,
Surely its beats your reddening, peeling skin,
Its old pallor lost forever

But your damn eyes are still green,
If not improved,
Perhaps I can gouge them out,
Let them bleed that pretty crimson,
Into my depths,
Give you a reason to die,
In this pitiful state,
All alone,
Unloved,
Not anymore

But let me hold you down,
Why struggle?
Those wings are useless,
In this distorted reality,
I wonder what your crime was,
To be so tainted and Fallen,
Lost forever

You seem inadequite,
Useless and dying,
Quit fighting it,
It isn't worth it,
Let me see you drown with sweet hate,
Loathing and lies

Your a sinner,
Those black wings are proof enough,
But they continue to flap pathetically in my now black waters,
Quit the lies,
Take that last breath,
Like you were meant to,
Even if your fallen,
A fallen 'Angel'
PostPosted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 12:18 am


This would be easier to read if it were broken up into stanzas.

The poem is really well thought out and written. I enjoyed it. I don't have much to say on it. It was really good.

Hirashio


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PostPosted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 6:27 pm


Eh I usually break them up but not this one, I'll be sure to fix it up sweatdrop
Oh thanks though whee
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