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 Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 11:00 am
Sometimes I wonder...
Deep inside...
Am I truly what the world sees me as...
The colors that shine from within me
Are not my own...for my heart is a guardian...
A guardian to a thousand secrets not my own...
Sometimes I wonder...
who I was meant to be...
If I am truly myself...
If I am nothing more than the ideas and concepts of those around me
I help others but cannot help myself
These tears are empty...
They are not my own....
Sometimes I wonder...
As I dive deeper and deeper into my heart and mind
Who I was meant to be, if not a mere program for others to feel better
There are days that that is all I feel like...
Nothing more than a program....
Nothing more than a dream....
I searched for truth...and only got sarcasm, jokes, and lies....
The deception hurts worse than death itself...
I want to be free...
I want to fight for what little life I have left...
I want to be me again.
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 11:22 am
Well done! Very meaningful and interesting. I heart it!
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:49 pm
Wolfie Kid Well done! Very meaningful and interesting. I heart it! Thank you. ^.^
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 12:40 pm
It is deep, dark, and difficult. What a downer, man. Why are there elipses everywhere? I wonder...
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 6:23 pm
Friends are like flowers,
They brightn' the hours. heart
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 8:00 pm
Gachetemas It is deep, dark, and difficult. What a downer, man. Why are there elipses everywhere? I wonder... My way of saying that there is something missing that you must read in between the lines. Remember ellipses are to indicate that text was left out.
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 8:01 pm
Zinnia64 Friends are like flowers, They brightn' the hours. heart Nice and true rhyme. ^.^
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Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 2:26 pm
dameonmac5918 Gachetemas It is deep, dark, and difficult. What a downer, man. Why are there elipses everywhere? I wonder... My way of saying that there is something missing that you must read in between the lines. Remember ellipses are to indicate that text was left out.
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 7:26 am
Gachetemas dameonmac5918 Gachetemas It is deep, dark, and difficult. What a downer, man. Why are there elipses everywhere? I wonder... My way of saying that there is something missing that you must read in between the lines. Remember ellipses are to indicate that text was left out. That's dumb. Everyone's entitled to their own opinion, my friend. There are those who will like it, and there are those who won't. You obviously are one of those. So, why don't you go critique some other poems, and I'll write some lighter poems to suit the tastes of people who like my poems, hmm?
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Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 11:04 pm
Admin edit: That is completely uncalled for.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 1:59 pm
Gachetemas I critiqued your mom last night. Oh, don't be so childish. You don't like my poems; you've proved your point. Now, please, stop posting here if you don't like it.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 8:25 pm
I loved this poem. It's what I tend to feel everyday so I can relate to it.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 10:25 pm
Admin edit: Why don't you take your own advice, Gachetemas? You made your critique in your initial post. Enough is enough. If I hear about you harassing this user again, you're out of the guild.
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 11:37 pm
.Oh.Snappizzles. I loved this poem. It's what I tend to feel everyday so I can relate to it. Thank you for your kind compliment. ^.^
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Posted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 4:17 am
A lovely poem, dark with a touch of sadness, but it also have a slight bit of defiance at the end. Keep on writing!
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