Poetry seeking feedback and opinions.

[undesirable_sacrifice]

I've decided to post multiple poems in one thread instead of making each poem a different topic. I hope I can get feeback and opinions on my work. I hope you enjoy. Thank you.

Subside to the Wolves Envy


To all their own piece
Like the embers of the truth
We fall apart

Decay and Death
As the children sleep
We dream of the happiness
As the plague silently creeps
To slowly invade their fragile bodies

Mind-control
Seduction

Their Dreams gone
Their lives once full of life now despair and grief

Slaves to their own higher
Higher their beliefs
Higher their minds

Nothing goes by
Without the touch of their mind
The touch of their control
Unable to compete To their rank

Alone

Together We will over run them
As the sheep in the meadow
We are there

Wolves in Sheep skin

Hidden from their eyes
We grow anxious

Eyes glowing against the night
Saliva drips from our mouths
Ears sensitive to each movement

Each sound of their bodies
Their sweet movement and grace
such is the life of a sheep

Followers
Unable to think for themselves
Unable to move without the other to follow
You don't think
you never question
all you know is to follow
your higher
With corruption and dishonest lies

Silently we creep
They are sleeping
But off not far
Alone
The higher wonders
To become the best
His greed and selfishness
Over-power him

Ambush
Ravaging
We will not hold back
Hunger strikes
Our Will thrives

As we come upon him
defenseless
He will know
How it feels to be at the bottom
As our teeth sink into the soft flesh
Blood pours from the newly ripped wounds
So alluring but never finished
We tear upon his body

Blood Pours
Fangs tear
Flesh falls
And the body soon lies limp
Upon the sweet grass
The air is calm
The wind soft

No noise
No sounds to the kill
He lays dead upon the grass

And now they will see
They can think for themselves.

Each as their own
Their eyes glow
Their ears p***k
And as they once where
Each to his own
The wolves crawl from under the sheep
Revealing the truth

We are the higher
With honest and truth
We will rise Against the corruption and death
Defeat this plague
One by One
We must realize our inner strength
And call our wolves
Call them out and defeat this mind control
We are under

Like the embers of truth
We will band together

First you and me
And they will realize
Others are not alone

So tear the flesh
And hurt defenseless

They are sheep
And so deserve to die
Subside to the wolves envy


Words are like Fairy Tales


My fairy tale
so real
So alive
Yet the shadows of the sun rise and fall between you and I
With each gaze
with each touch
the dream shatters
Falling
out of my hands
trapped in the dream world
I knew this couldn't be real
But when I wake I am feeling so alone
yet your words are there
so strong
I need no fairy tale
Or so I thought
no memories of the past to tell me what I want
Because I know that in my heart
I truly want this to last

My fairy tale
Is never the same
But you are always there
Holding me close

As each second passes
I look into your eyes
truly this can't be real
What you've told me
I can't believe your words

So hurt but the memories
coming alive
I run from the nightmares
Back to my fairy tale

Safe and warm
Back to the beginning
In my fairy tale
I want to stay forever
Because you hold me close
And everything seems so real.


As One


As if the words needed to be spoken
A kiss sweeter than life

I'm bound to you
With eternal love

A fire so bright
Yet Unable to love

Distant and far
As the winds upon the sea

Never to have your arms around me
Embracing me in your warmth

But separate
Loving but never feeling

So distant
So afraid

I never want to let go
Not of you

For the wind and the waters have bound us
So sick and so fragile

I need you
This is inevitable
So hear my cries
Feel my love

And together we can conjure the broken love
Only you and me share

Waters rage
Wind soars
Together we will embrace
As one

Never to be alone
Never give in
For the fire burns with eternal love
And binds us as one


Viper

Silence is the key

to this absent mind

Quiet and hidden

Will you hit the right one

Will you over run the powers given

Will you hurt yourself

Trying to unlock me

This silence Unforgiven

The powers unlimited

Forget yourself

Try your best

As the poison invades your body

Slowly sliding through your skin

As the veins quiver to the shot

The vipers tongue

Slips to yours

Don't fear this venom

But figure out the key

The silence and the movements

Unknown but Alive

slithering through your body

torment and pain

equals the charity of love and suffering

to gain your power

you must give in

to everything and anything

to the vipers sting

and the poisons

adrenaline pumps through your body

weak and disoriented

slow and hallucinating

your body will die

slowly

your mind does not know it

not yet

but it will

and it will come

hard and fast

the wrath of your own cause

your own fears

bow down to them

let them succumb to you

let them hurt you

that is the way

to fully experience

the vipers sting

and you will die

with the viper

forever.




Hell fire

So young outside but wise within
Felling so lost yet somehow, its home
Too knowledge to leave, too wanted to stay
Anywhere i go, trouble just follows
I always bring the darkness, its raining...
Inside and out, I dont know how to stop it...
All the masks, they seem to constantly pour


I know how I must look to you, but its just for show
I am not what you see, but I cannot reveal...
all that's here is not in the right at all...

so young to you, but I am nothing but old and bitter
Living through hell and fire after,
I am mostly dead inside and nothing but screaming
I have been forsaken and risen to sins ladders

Constantly breaking, I am falling apart
From what I haven't got a clue...
It's hurting, everything inside and outward too...
It's burns and bites, this gnawing, it is an emptiness
A broken void, that cannot be cured, not by madness,
Long ago it was removed, and I cant remember what it was

I have betrayed, loved ones and the rest
It was unintended, but I could not stop, I denied
I refused to take the blame and am now forewver shunned
Apperaring innocent and harmless, when truth deadly dangerous
Living through war and madness, everafter
I am scared, worn and washed up
I am never to be light and loved, stuck in the hell fire...  

[Wolfie Kid]

I like wolves. The first poem was about wolves. Therefore, I like you and your poetry...
Any questions?  

[Wolfie Kid]

I wrote a poem called Hell Fire as well. It was in memory of a woman who lived down my street, until her house was set on fire. Her kids got out safe, but she died in hospital a week later. The house is still all boarded up: it only happened about three or so months ago. She was a great friend of mine. Here: I'll put it down -

Blissful sleep, unaware of danger:
Ignorant of death and flame.
But while we sleep, screams pierce the air,
Disaster spreading hurt and pain.

In the dark dawn, smoke chokes the sky
And fire burns the skin.
A simple act, with complex results:
A night of Hell was to begin.

The fire ripped through the sleepy house.
Children give a frightened cry,
Clawing quickly to salvation,
Alas, the mother’s still inside.

Sleep is broken, an urgent shout.
Sirens racing to the call.
Flames licking the house’s frame
And drifting up it’s wall.

After a long and tiring struggle,
There remains no more than black.
The children are safe, but once in care
The mother didn’t make it back.

She lies in a deep, blissful sleep:
Ignorant of death and flame.
No more do screams pierce the air.
For a victim of the hurt and pain.