Pressure

[Lord Thundernoob]

Pressure
Tony Davis

Distress, Depression, Anxiety
Inside the pressure deadens as it grows
I wish to feel
To embrace my sadness
My tears are blocked
I need my tears
Where will I live?
Where will I turn?
Why has my family forsaken me?
Why do they say they love me, when they refuse to stop hurting me?
I have no home, I cannot feel
It’s all inside, deadening, numbing as it grows.  

[Hirashio]

While your poem was good... I think it needed something. Though, I can't put my finger on exactly what. It might have been the length or you needed stronger words. Still, it was a good poem.  

[Frankendoll.]

I liked it, but in some parts it did seem like it could have been thought about a little more, such as :-
''My tears are blocked
I need my tears''

It didn't sit right as I read it...  

[YoTeAmo]

I think the poem was very good. It showed such emotion that I could almost feel what you were feeling as you wrote it.  

[Mrkurosakie]

Electrash

I liked it, but in some parts it did seem like it could have been thought about a little more, such as :-
''My tears are blocked
I need my tears''

It didn't sit right as I read it...

I sort of agree, when I read that part it was a little awkward, and I think there could've been more creativity in expressing that part, but it was nothing if not good, and nonetheless was a good poem.