Quick Emo Poem

[HarlequinGoddess]

Not my style, but I thought it was fitting for my mood that day. I found it via a friend on myspace.com.

"When you're left with only a bullet, I'll bring the trigger & a promise to pull it.
I'll be the end of everyone who's ever entered your life & taken pieces out of it.
I'll give you enough time to regain your composure..
To reconstruct a heart that's torn apart from over-exposure.
I know forever isn't long enough to forget
The faces & places that played out your tragedy."

 

[Hirashio]

While good do not us &'s in your poem. It draws away from it.  

[Frankendoll.]

Yeah, try not to use '&' in your writing.

And by titling it 'emo' you've opened a Pandora's Box, I swear. xd  

[YoTeAmo]

I love the poem. It shows a deep kind of friendship and sympathy. I, personally, like the use of '&' in your poem because when I write poems at home, I tend to use that symbol. The word 'and' seems more final, I guess, than the symbol '&'. If you were submitting it to a contest, I would use the word 'and' simply because it is more proper than '&' is. I can't stand it when I'm at school writing things down and someone criticizes me for using '&' instead of 'and'.  

[Dark_rose_fighter]

Good job. But you need to try harder on your rythms.  

[YoTeAmo]

Dark_rose_Fighter

Good job. But you need to try harder on your rythms.

Not all poems have to rhyme..  

[Lady Pica]

Rythm and rhyme are two different things. Having a consistent rythm just makes it easier to read, especially out aloud.  

[YoTeAmo]

I realize that they are different. I read the comment too fast, but a poem does not have to have a rythm either.