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 Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2007 3:33 pm
Just something I thought up, its supposed to be read like a chant with a sort of melody...Tell me what'cha think about it along with what you believe the meaning is
Rest thy mournful lies,
Swallow thine wine and wither and die,
Hath thou no regrets?
Come here in brother,
Thy sulpuchre of dreadful minds,
Hateful binds in thine lies,
Rest thou faithful,
Hate thy lies,
Hath thou no mercy?
In thine withering eyes,
Lower thee suffocating lies,
Won't thou drink thee wine?
Rest thy mournful lies,
Swallow thine wine and wither and die,
In thine sulpuchre of dreadful minds
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 6:08 pm
That's awful. Never write archaic words again unless you already talk or write like that.
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Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 8:02 pm
Don't listen to Gachetemas. That was a very great poem, and I hope you post more.
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Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 3:07 pm
Sorry to disappoint you
And thanks Dameonmac ^^
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Posted: Tue Apr 03, 2007 8:03 pm
I really loved reading it. ^^ It sounds like someone did something awful or lied to much and another person is trying to get them to kill themselves with poison. I'm not much into disyphering poem such as this but in lamens terms, that's what it sound like to me.
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Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 7:11 am
It was great, and reminded me of the goodness of old english!
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Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 7:39 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 30, 2007 8:00 am
That was good.
Maybe cheese to go with the wine next? smile
cheese_whine
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Posted: Fri May 04, 2007 9:23 am
Looks like you tried to cram as much old-english as you can into one place to make it look deep. It failed, reminds me of Lilium.
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