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 Posted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 8:09 pm
Do you see?
Have you seen the problem of it all?
Have you seen how much I fall?
Do you even see,
The pain inside of me?
When you'd scream and yell,
Everytime I fell.
Each time I've broken a little inside,
No matter how hard I've tried
I don't think you see,
The pain inside of me.
The hurt you keep sitting there,
I don't think you even care
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Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:15 am
The poem is nice. It seems a little too thought out, like the words didn't come easily. Too....structured. But it was good, all in all. And I like your quote in your signature. Very cool.
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Posted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 9:07 pm
I really enjoyed reading that. smile Thank you for sharing with us. ^^
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Posted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 12:47 pm
I like that. It reminds me of my own parents. I think all parents are like that, actually, at some point or other.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 3:50 am
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