When the World Ceased to Be

[Cherished Strawberries]

When the World Ceased to Be

When the world ceased to be,
It was no pretty thing.
I know because I saw it,
I heard the Doom's Day ring.

My daddy couldn't stop it;
In fact, they took him first.
My mommy only cried;
I think that made it worse.

All around were signs,
No one could ignore it.
All alone inside,
I just couldn't bear it.

With fire in the sky,
Raining down on all,
And tears in every eye,
Of we who saw them fall.

The water rose much higher
Than it had ever gone.
I prayed it'd stop the fires;
I was so very wrong.

When all the world was burning,
And everyone lost hope,
I knew the end was coming,
I knew I couldn't cope.

Without my loving daddy,
With mommy gone away,
I knew the world's destruction
Was some way to make us pay.

Somehow, somewhere, someone
Was mad at everyone.
To warrant so much pain,
I wondered what we'd done.

With my last dying breath,
I tried to say a prayer.
"Dear Jesus, help me to be
Not so very scared."

But all of life I know,
Was burned away that day.
Because I watched some of them
Come through heaven's gates.

When my turn had come,
I looked around inside.
But my mommy and my daddy
Were not here to reside.

I think back on that day,
And rememer my mom and dad;
What could they have done
To become so very bad?

The End

 

[greeneyesandglasses]

Wow...that was really deep...It made me think as I went, and that doesn't happen with some poetry. Keep up the good work ^)__(^  

[Cherished Strawberries]

Aw, thanks. I try not to write poems that are just shallow twiddles with something like 'I had a bat/He lived on a rack.' Thank you for your support.  

[Asher_Scree]

I loved the rythmn in this. And, this could just be me, the descriptive words made it sound like the narrator could have been a child, which I find interesting.

Though, let's all just confirm that there is nothing wrong with bats on racks, alright?  

[Cherished Strawberries]

Heheh, of course not. I actually love bats. It's just such an easy word to rhyme with: bat, mat, cat, fat, rat, tat, gnat, flat, pat, vat, hat, sat, etc. sweatdrop And, yes, I tried to make it seem more childish, so that it fit. I was thinking of it all happening to a six-year-old girl, to be more emotional.  

[[_TorturingLiars_]]

Great poem! Really deep, and very descriptive! The rhyming flowed nicely, and it was very emotional . I enjoy reading it very much biggrin



Keep up the good work.


~ Torturing Liars~  

[Cherished Strawberries]

Yay! I'm so glad so many people like my work. I refrain from posting (major) crap, so I'm glad. mrgreen Thank you all so much! whee  

[Patron with a Mission]

I love this. 3nodding Kudos for good poetry, my friend.  

[Cherished Strawberries]

4laugh So many people like it. I'm so happy. heart