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Iris of the Rain

PostPosted: Sat May 19, 2007 5:55 pm
Just a little poem I wrote a couple months ago. Please, if it is truly awful, tell me as soon as humanly possible. Thank you, and enjoy!

Without You...

My life is bare
Without you
Blank
Dark
You bring the colors,
The Paint
And you paint my life
Beautifully
With designs
So colorful
So bright
Do not leave me
My love
For without you I
Am bare
 
PostPosted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 10:51 am
I really like how the poem flows. I love the poem also. You should keep writing. I only thing I would change is the last two lines. I would move I down to the last line, it flows a little better that way. But you could keep it up one line as well.  

Anye5


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PostPosted: Sun Jun 24, 2007 6:16 pm
The poem was very nice and I enjoyed reading it.  
PostPosted: Mon Jun 25, 2007 10:21 am
It really is very nice. Do you have any other poems?  

Rutoh-Chan

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