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Prologue
Kay so, this is the prologue for my new & improved Elemental Eclipse story yay!
1.) the [] means it's a new paragraph (the journal thingie won't let me indent =.=;; )
2.) this is still a rough draft, it may change sweatdrop
3.) COMMENT. ME. If I don't get any comments I won't post the rest of the story <.< Do I have to reinstate the 5-comments-or-I-won't-post-the-next-part rule?

[ ]Panting heavily, I let the sword fall from my hand. It fell with a clatter on the cement as rain slowly rolled down my face. The fresh blood on my arms and legs was dragged off by each droplet that slid down onto the cement. Every drop ended up there; blood, rain, tears, they all fell to the same place. I slowly opened one eye, then the other; my face never straying from the half-lidded and numb expression so familiar to me now. The boy in front of me lay face-down on the blood-soaked ground. Blood coated his face, his hair, and his tattered clothes. A flash of lighting framed his hair in a halo of light for a millisecond, making him look almost surreal in the grey of the storm. My mind, once foggy and full of swirling thoughts, was empty.
[ ]One image, his smiling face, slowly began filling my thoughts. It was an expression I hadn’t seen in years, now almost alien to me; yet here it was, just as clear as if I’d seen it yesterday. I could feel my numbness starting to crack and slip. Words he’d said and things we’d done floated into my thoughts and began their own swirling torrent of a whirlpool in the midst of my mind. I blinked through the rain a few times, and knelt down over him. Slowly, a dreamlike quality to my actions, I reached up and stroked a lock of his bloodstained hair. A tear fell down my cheek and I began shaking. Suddenly, the full gravity of the situation crashed into me. I… I killed him… I had t-to but… but… I lifted his limp form from the ground with some effort and threw my arms around his neck. My breath came in hiccupy sobs now. “Oh God, oh God I… I didn’t want… it wasn’t…” I began sobbing, babbling hysterically, nothing made sense anymore… why? Why hadn’t I fought? Why had I simply complied as with all the others? Why hadn’t I been able to resist?!
[ ]I pounded one fist onto the blood stained ground as the last pieces of my emotionless state fell away, revealing my true feelings for the first time in years. The rain started washing the pools of blood from the cement, hiding all evidence that anything had happened. His blood, my blood, all of it was draining away like any hope I had of escaping the hell that was my life. I clutched his limp body to mine tightly, still sobbing hysterically. The last shred of the world I’d once lived in was gone, struck down by my own hands.
[ ]A voice, thick with victory and self pride assaulted my ears from beside me. “Yes, very nice. Excellent work Bunny. My plan can finally move forward, thanks to you…”

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  • User Comments: [2]
    -Misa-Misa-chan-583-
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    Sat May 02, 2009 @ 12:38am


    “Yes, very nice. Excellent work Bunny. My plan can finally move forward, thanks to you…” Teehee ^^
    I stole the last line, i figured it might help...
    ...
    wait, there's something wrong with it.
    Anyways.
    GOOD JOB BUN BUN,
    Fabulous, as always 3nodding


    Ameisen
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    Sat May 30, 2009 @ 08:56am


    Truthfully, this made me chuckle. Dunno why. =D...


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