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Yuzania Forest:Carirain

some time between 1861-1865

"Azihinai!!"some on yelled from behind "stop this right now! Come back let me explain! It's not waht you think!" The young girl stioped and turned to face the speaker.her wet hair black plastered to her face almost hiding her dark orange eyesmaking her look like a demon striaght from the gates. Dhe looked at the speaker with a murderous glare. The rain falling even harder now as Azihinai truned to leave.
"Don't even try. There is nothing you can do. What you have done in done there is no way any one can fix it now."she stopped walking and turned to look back at the thing she was leaving behind. Yes,thing for it wasn't a person it barely desvered to be called a thing."Be happy your ONLY being exlied and not killed like the rest of Them." As far as she knew this traitor belonged to Them, was one of Them.After all the speaker teamed up with them and tried to kill Azihinai.
"Zi! Please just let me explain!Give me one more chance! Please! I'll do anything just dont walk away! Don't leave me here! Please!"a hand reacked out and grabed Zi's wrist she heard sobs coming from behind her. She pulled her hand way and bit back tears of her own. She held her hands close to her body so that this thing could not attempt to stop her agian.
"NO! What you have done can not be changed.There is nothing you or any of your little friends can do to change what happened. Next time thin k about you actions." Zi started to walk away from the huddled crying mass in the middle of the clearing. when she got to the edge of the small clearing she truned to face the thing once more."Your severices are no longer need to the Fentor. As much as i would like to kill you now with my own blade I can not. with this i shall ake my leave." With this Zi turned and left the little clearing for the final time. when she was far enough away she broke down and let the tears she had been holding back freely fall down her face. She fell to her knees and just cried with the rain pouring down her face and soaking her clothes just as her tears did.Ton where are you.she tried to focus on something else, although it wasnt quite working.soon enough her thoughts changed to that of her two best friends Zictora and Ashonaton.THey were the only people she had left,the only ones she had ever really loved, the only ones that were ever there for her. She loved them with all her being. She thought of how Zic and his hyperactiveness always manged to make her smile. And Ton oh how she loved his smile it was a rare thing every sense his parents died. She thought aboput how even though Ton was blind he could still find people and places then Zic or Zi.Ton where are you now. I need you.soon she fell asleep with the her tears and rain mixing with the mud around her.

corvettes4life
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Thu Jun 14, 2007 @ 12:26am

hey good start. i like it but now i might have to find a differnet name for one of my character, course he has 3 names really but o well

GracieFortune
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Sat Jun 16, 2007 @ 01:04pm

LOVE IT!!

in death we live
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Sun Jun 17, 2007 @ 12:52am

thankies

Yssa-Boo
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Sun Jun 17, 2007 @ 01:38am

iya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i luved it!!!!! it was awsome!!! i cant believe u had it in u!!!! no no no jkjk luved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

TheMadHatter48
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Sat Aug 04, 2007 @ 07:25pm

that'll be a tough act to follow. honestly. your stories are getting better. They make more sense and are more consistant.(ya, know. compared to stuff you used to write) I really liked it. the only thing that bugged me was the grammar(once an editor always an editor i guess) other than that it was very good. WELL DONE!!

Mon Aug 06, 2007 @ 02:15pm

well sam ill let you edit it when i get home

Wed Aug 08, 2007 @ 05:20am

i would like that thank you

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