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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
Unknown
these shadows are tourturing me,
the unknown ,
eroding my Foundation,
the shadows are fliting about me,
teasing my eyesight
I feel salvation just out of my reach,
my fingertips brushing it,
and yet again as I grow closer to freedom,
the unknown sends a blow my way,
and knockes me off of my path of straw.
I'm tumbling though my sheilds,
that of which I do not know,
prepelling me along the path I shouldn't go,
I turn and sence freedom from my dark path,
I reach out, and the darkness blows me away again.
And so I tumble in the velvety darkness,
and light flitting in and out of my eyesight,
tourturing me like an oasis is to a man dying of thirst. tring to lure me to it,
to save me.
not knowing it's killing me in it's own way.
-Sakuka






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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Mon Nov 19, 2007 @ 05:22am
wow i like this poem too! o_o I love how you say your fingertips are brushing against salvation, that's a really beautiful picture that line creates and I also love how you end it in the last line, too. the lines flow together really smoothly there. I like the whole poem though! XD


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