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xlovinlifex
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ChaPter:1 ~ :mysterious fall....
Chapter 1:

"God, where the hell am I?" I mumbled to myself angrily and exhausted as I pushed the tall grasses aside moving myself to space where my foot could touch the solid surface. I looked around at the tall trees and the endless land filled of grass. I tired to study my surroundings a little more, but gave up after seeing no difference between the nearest acorn tree next to me and the tree furthest I could see from me. I took a deep breath and let out the frustration in me at that moment and continued to walk. I took my step slowly and calmly at this foreign place, but I soon on lost my patience. I quickened my pace and took random turns around the towering moss-covered trees. I quickened my pace a little more and soon seemed to be jogging. As I jogged I felt my bare legs sweep along the long, dew-covered grass with a feeling of freshness, as if it was the only thing on my side at the moment.

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"What do you think your doing?" She looked and glared at me with hated and suspicion. She walked closer to me. Her glared pierced me deeper as she came closer. I took a step back.

"N..nothing..I..I was just... saw the door open...and I thought..." my voiced trailed down, my eyebrows wrinkled and i stared at the floor afraid to lookup.

"Thought what," she said with a icy tone, that sent chills up my spine. I felt her presence closer to me.

"Umm..." I said quietly, wondering in fear whether she had heard me or not.

"You know you shouldn't be her so," she started, voice seemingly genial and smooth, and “get out now, before I changed my mind." She turned around and walked to her desk taking some papers and scanning them. I quickly turned around and ran out the door of this room and ran out the huge doors of the house. After, I had exit out of the house, I continued to run, not dropping my speed. I ran without thinking, where i was going, all I cared at that moment was like all the other times I left the house, was to get away from it.

I soon felt my self gasping for air, no longer able to run and took a corner and stopped as my body trembled from not only the long sprint, but also from the cold icy glare and piercing needles of her voice.

As soon as I had calmed down, I tried to walk back home, but it was harder the walking up a mountain. I didn't want to go back and hear her voice, or see her look at me with so much hate. It was painful. Every time she speaks, I wanted to punch her, but when I look at her glare, my motives of any kind turns into fear.

I walked aimlessly, not even trying to get home. My thought was filled with the punishment I may receive when I return. The very thought made my eyebrow wrinkle in worry and anger.

"I hate this messed up place, I wish I could be somewhere else and be happy!" I mumbled loudly glaring at the cement blocks ahead of me. Without noticing the slightly leveled cement surface, I continued to walk and felt my body trip. Without time to be surprised, my body hit the cold cement floor.

CHIRP CHIRP>

"Urg...my head...god it hurts," I groaned, rubbing my head as I sat up. I shook my head and squinted my eyes, trying to focus them. I drop my hand on to the floor, supporting my body. I tried to massage my head, only feeling a small bruise and out of pain, I grabbed the soft grass beneath my hands and ripped them out. Then I shook my head once again hoping to shake the pain out. Then my eyes widen with realization. First I looked at my hand. Grass...? Then I looked around, tall tress, bushes of blueberries and other fruits that I had no idea what it may be, grass, logs, sparkling minerals in the ground. This was defiantly not the city where I lived.


"Where... am I?"


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nabudis_X
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Sat Jan 26, 2008 @ 07:52pm


Too many IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
CHANGE the way you write your sentences. Maybe active or passive tones.
EX:I looked around at the tall trees and the endless land filled of grass
My EX:Tall trees and an endless fields of grass surrounded me, as I surveyed my surroundings.
HHHHHHEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!
FIND AN EDITOR!


xlovinlifex
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Wed Jan 30, 2008 @ 10:57pm


plz ppl that read it...comment even if it does suck.....


AsianAngel100
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Tue Feb 19, 2008 @ 09:53pm


I heart it!! You are a very good writer Jasmine! 3nodding


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